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End Times
https://tinyurl.com/42jtznsx
It rained in the desert
until the waters ran high
and washed away sand
for centuries dry
deeper than mountains
a city appeared...
It rained in the desert
until the waters ran high
and washed away sand
for centuries dry
deeper than mountains
a city appeared...
Published 22nd Sep 2024
| Edited 25th Sep 2024
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My lyrics/suno music
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23rd Sep 2024 8:59pm
Yeah, that's gonna happen more often. Lost habitats being slowly revealed. There was a recent news feature on it, in fact. 😊
25th Sep 2024 11:34am
29th Sep 2024 1:08pm
I liked the tune, yes. The guitar finger picking sounded quite intricate & although reflective, I did find the melody a little too bouncy & jolly, considering you're singing about 'end times'. I would have ended the track with a giant explosive effect also, lol. I do agree with you on what God needs to teach us every 10,000 years, however. What is raw gravel btw, it is a new sound genre? 😊
29th Sep 2024 2:37pm
Personally I've always been a fan of the exploding last line, mate and you're right about those jangly bits I was aiming for a satirical edge something my suno muse finds difficult to replicate.
I did consider "baked cement" as a genre but after 30 takes tbh I'd had enough. If you liked this then https://tinyurl.com/yuff9ynv
explores a similar theme.
Cheers
I did consider "baked cement" as a genre but after 30 takes tbh I'd had enough. If you liked this then https://tinyurl.com/yuff9ynv
explores a similar theme.
Cheers
25th Sep 2024 9:05pm
29th Sep 2024 2:38pm
