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WATER BEARER'S BLUES
i've got the jug, babe,
if you've got the time
and i've got some strings
if you've got a rhyme
and i've got a pen
to draw you a dream
of utopian peace
or just think up a scheme
and try this
and try that
and do everything
and be all at once,
pauper and king
and dreamer and doer
and maker of art,
a poetic hopeful,
a mender of hearts,
a loner, then lonely
dispenser of blues
then self contained
sparkler
in brightest of hues
who stands for the weakest
and mourns for their pain,
its all in the plan
for Aquarian brains
if you've got the time
and i've got some strings
if you've got a rhyme
and i've got a pen
to draw you a dream
of utopian peace
or just think up a scheme
and try this
and try that
and do everything
and be all at once,
pauper and king
and dreamer and doer
and maker of art,
a poetic hopeful,
a mender of hearts,
a loner, then lonely
dispenser of blues
then self contained
sparkler
in brightest of hues
who stands for the weakest
and mourns for their pain,
its all in the plan
for Aquarian brains
Author's Note
Inspired by the Astrological Comp.
Rhyming...it's good for the soul.
Rhyming...it's good for the soul.
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Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
7th Aug 2024 11:43pm
Found myself humming along to no tune in particular. Reminds me of some of the street poets in my home city of New Orleans
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8th Aug 2024 1:22am
Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. Much appreciated. I visited your home city many years ago and loved it -- atmosphere and ambiance all it's own.
Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
8th Aug 2024 00:30am
LMAO @ the opening two lines! This is terrific! And SO Aquarian! Thanks for entering!
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8th Aug 2024 1:23am
Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
8th Aug 2024 2:13am
I'm not a rhymer, but I totally dug this. The pacing was fucking perfect, and the poem just trip-trapped along my mind. I really liked this. Good luck in the comp!
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Re: Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
8th Aug 2024 10:46am
Thanks, Betty. It's nice when folks enjoy.
Rhyming just seems to happen sometimes, and I always enjoy it.
Rhyming just seems to happen sometimes, and I always enjoy it.
Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
8th Aug 2024 3:19am
Dear J,
“and i've got a pen
to draw you a dream” that’s a very pretty phrase. A very clever poem and rhyming is such a difficult format to me. I think you’ve done it brilliantly. I wish you all the best for this comp. Awesome write. H🌷
“and i've got a pen
to draw you a dream” that’s a very pretty phrase. A very clever poem and rhyming is such a difficult format to me. I think you’ve done it brilliantly. I wish you all the best for this comp. Awesome write. H🌷
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8th Aug 2024 10:59am
Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
11th Aug 2024 00:23am
Sitting in a corner of a blues bar enjoying an amazing number. Bravo. Hugs and love, Oral
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Re: Re. WATER BEARER'S BLUES
11th Aug 2024 00:57am
You're one of my favs, so it means a lot. Thanks for reading and the kind comment. Much appreciated.
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11th Aug 2024 1:08am