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Bleed
I bleed on the white tile floor
waiting for you to clean it up.
You walk by as if you could
not care less
I just wanted you to care once.
waiting for you to clean it up.
You walk by as if you could
not care less
I just wanted you to care once.
Published 6th Aug 2024
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6th Aug 2024 00:14am
Sometimes we bleed for the wrong people. This is a perfect metaphor for unrequited love. Well done.
Mundus
Mundus
6th Aug 2024 00:16am
6th Aug 2024 1:29am
Ouch, yeah, the absolute bloodletting when someone you desperately want to care... just won't. Or can't. I guess it doesn't matter, the casual cruelty hurts no matter what the intention. Nice write.
(Psst. I think you had a little autocorrect uh-oh. This careless would be care less)
not careless
(Psst. I think you had a little autocorrect uh-oh. This careless would be care less)
not careless
6th Aug 2024 1:54am
6th Aug 2024 4:51am
7th Aug 2024 00:27am
