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It's what you *didn't* do
I've broken a plate,
yet never a bone,
always left to fate
how the branches have grown.
A night cap to acclimate
when breaking boughs chaperone
that sharp shivery weight
of dreams never shown;
body laying prone,
a messy scene sewn
before your bewildered state.
Do me the honor of reserving this date,
and remember the time as my eyes dialate.
yet never a bone,
always left to fate
how the branches have grown.
A night cap to acclimate
when breaking boughs chaperone
that sharp shivery weight
of dreams never shown;
body laying prone,
a messy scene sewn
before your bewildered state.
Do me the honor of reserving this date,
and remember the time as my eyes dialate.
Published 3rd Jun 2024
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5th Jun 2024 2:01pm
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11th Jun 2024 2:55pm
11th Jun 2024 6:09pm
Thanks! I loved reading through some of yours... I'll be sure to repay the love with some comments.
11th Jun 2024 6:21pm
12th Jun 2024 3:21am
Anonymous
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24th Jun 2024 7:55pm
HI, Cait!
I enjoy poems that force me to ponder and this is one. I love the complexity of the piece and how you leave the deciphering to the reader it satifies my sapiosexual desires. Brava!
I enjoy poems that force me to ponder and this is one. I love the complexity of the piece and how you leave the deciphering to the reader it satifies my sapiosexual desires. Brava!
6th Jul 2024 3:46am
10th Jul 2024 7:33pm
3rd Aug 2024 3:06am
What can I say? Every line is condensed and concise. You capture a lot in what you have to say. The brevity with the deep contemplation, and emotional analogies through metaphor and environment, are pretty original. Nice and "creative" visual with the "branching" and "cracking." You definitely have the gift. Keep putting pen to pad, and I hope to see more from you soon!
