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KING
the peasant king
of three cats and a dog
reigns over his land
with the grace
of an arch angel
and his walk
is a master's dance
across a carpet
of grass
plush and green
and holy
as the pope's
top sheet
this is
how a king lives,
how a king's sun
rises
and, oh, how blue
his pristine sky
and how beautifully
his garden grows
with only a thousand
weeds a day
amen
of three cats and a dog
reigns over his land
with the grace
of an arch angel
and his walk
is a master's dance
across a carpet
of grass
plush and green
and holy
as the pope's
top sheet
this is
how a king lives,
how a king's sun
rises
and, oh, how blue
his pristine sky
and how beautifully
his garden grows
with only a thousand
weeds a day
amen
Published 6th May 2024
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6th May 2024 10:04pm
Stunning shit.
The master of simple living, and the beautiful way that you painted it as a hymn, not a hell.
These images mesh in a way that is glorious: Peasant king, arch angel. It elevates the simple man to that of a deity.
the peasant king
of three cats and a dog
reigns over his land
with the grace
of an arch angel
You use that same trope: holy, pope, king, amen, to really weave this in a prayer-form. To show the thanks for the subject, or the simplicity, I can't really figure it out.
But the subject of this poem is content in a way that's so pure it makes my heart hurt.
Beautifully penned.
The master of simple living, and the beautiful way that you painted it as a hymn, not a hell.
These images mesh in a way that is glorious: Peasant king, arch angel. It elevates the simple man to that of a deity.
the peasant king
of three cats and a dog
reigns over his land
with the grace
of an arch angel
You use that same trope: holy, pope, king, amen, to really weave this in a prayer-form. To show the thanks for the subject, or the simplicity, I can't really figure it out.
But the subject of this poem is content in a way that's so pure it makes my heart hurt.
Beautifully penned.
7th May 2024 1:15am
Thank you so much for that beautiful critique. I'm so happy that this poem touched you.
7th May 2024 4:09am
Dear J,
What Betty said! Whatever I write would seem pedestrian after that. The beauty of gratitude in loving your pets and nature is an exacta. Lovely piece. H🌷
What Betty said! Whatever I write would seem pedestrian after that. The beauty of gratitude in loving your pets and nature is an exacta. Lovely piece. H🌷
7th May 2024 11:46am
Thank you, Honoria. I'm so happy you enjoyed this poem. Your comments brighten my day.
