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Absent the Hunger
I heard the birds
chose not to rise
tears betray
my blurry eyes
Resting here
unable to sleep
unknown reasons
for why I weep
I am not meant
to exist today
how I feel
no words convey
Devoid of senses
empty, numb
no smell or flavour
seems to come
Absent the hunger
deficient desire
without even a start
decision to retire
chose not to rise
tears betray
my blurry eyes
Resting here
unable to sleep
unknown reasons
for why I weep
I am not meant
to exist today
how I feel
no words convey
Devoid of senses
empty, numb
no smell or flavour
seems to come
Absent the hunger
deficient desire
without even a start
decision to retire
Published 19th Apr 2024
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19th Apr 2024 9:07pm
19th Apr 2024 11:49pm
20th Apr 2024 1:40pm
Love this write, the flow is perfect and subject very engaging and relatable but I particularly like your "word economics" ( if that's even a thing lol) the brevity in each verse really lends itself to the subject matter and is really impactful. Awesomeness :)
24th Jun 2024 7:45pm
Hello, Mel
Unfortunately I empathize much too intimately with this beautifully written, poignant piece. I am trying to not perpetually yearn for my bed. Doing fine until my Dad died...now I'm back in it. This too shall pass. I hope you are doing well.
Unfortunately I empathize much too intimately with this beautifully written, poignant piece. I am trying to not perpetually yearn for my bed. Doing fine until my Dad died...now I'm back in it. This too shall pass. I hope you are doing well.
