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can i?
look around your self
take the forgiveness
that someone has asked for
love the fact
that you are free
know that only you has the control
of your mind
no one can change that
promise me
can i trust you?
take the forgiveness
that someone has asked for
love the fact
that you are free
know that only you has the control
of your mind
no one can change that
promise me
can i trust you?
Published 21st Feb 2010
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20th Jul 2011 5:32pm
Lacks a little depth for me, not much for me to cling to. I struggled with the first line a little bit, but I think in the context of the poem you have it right.
I think the ending saves this poem from being less than average. You did do a good job there.
I think the ending saves this poem from being less than average. You did do a good job there.
