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Serpentine Scholar
Serpentine scholar
Servile sway
Study the snake
Prized recoil
Split decision
Granted a token
Forked tongue
Smothering spell
Dust lapped
Inward language
Broken character
Sliding spine
Vanity gathers
On the surface
Mazes ground
Cracked and dry
Bare bones
Hide wilderness
Back and belly
Dagger pangs
Eyes like dice
Storied reptile
Mirror shatters
Death glance
Hinging pose
Hypnotic trance
Graven grey
Betrayal kissed
Shedding skin
Beating heart
Locked jowls
Poison enters
Coursing blood
Victim sanctum
Recumbent horror
Feverish rush
Animal optics
Human nature
Slithers towards
Chasing energy
War rattles
As atmospheric
Blinding scales
Coarse to hands
Awkward feel
Hissing sounds
Like loud thunder
Heard all around
Servile sway
Study the snake
Prized recoil
Split decision
Granted a token
Forked tongue
Smothering spell
Dust lapped
Inward language
Broken character
Sliding spine
Vanity gathers
On the surface
Mazes ground
Cracked and dry
Bare bones
Hide wilderness
Back and belly
Dagger pangs
Eyes like dice
Storied reptile
Mirror shatters
Death glance
Hinging pose
Hypnotic trance
Graven grey
Betrayal kissed
Shedding skin
Beating heart
Locked jowls
Poison enters
Coursing blood
Victim sanctum
Recumbent horror
Feverish rush
Animal optics
Human nature
Slithers towards
Chasing energy
War rattles
As atmospheric
Blinding scales
Coarse to hands
Awkward feel
Hissing sounds
Like loud thunder
Heard all around
Published 5th Apr 2024
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Hello C,
I really liked the gathering of words, it seemed a dark weaving. Its just amazing how you could write this. There are many hidden serpents, the serpent being one of the oldest images still holding great powers. I can not help staring to see a caduceus, the two coiled snaked staff , rising from your words.
Much enjoyed
R
I really liked the gathering of words, it seemed a dark weaving. Its just amazing how you could write this. There are many hidden serpents, the serpent being one of the oldest images still holding great powers. I can not help staring to see a caduceus, the two coiled snaked staff , rising from your words.
Much enjoyed
R
5th Apr 2024 4:32pm
Yeah, a lot of it was finding physical traits of a snake and using them as metaphors to represent dark things. Based on exploring that through this piece, a snake is a very analogous thing. Weaving it together, I got 16 stanzas out of it. Anyway, thanks for reading, and putting consideration in your commentary.
I agree with Anne. The short phrases you chose were powerful
and enthralling. I loved "Cracked and dry bare bones hide wilderness.
Back and Belly dagger pangs eyes like dice" I could mention every verse
of the poem, I liked it so much.
And the end....perfect.
Many serpents among us. Stellar writing my friend.
and enthralling. I loved "Cracked and dry bare bones hide wilderness.
Back and Belly dagger pangs eyes like dice" I could mention every verse
of the poem, I liked it so much.
And the end....perfect.
Many serpents among us. Stellar writing my friend.
5th Apr 2024 4:35pm
I really appreciate your kindness and support. I'm not just saying that either. It's very inspiring for me when you critique my work, heh. Just glad that there are some people that can appreciate the hard work I put into my writings. Anyway, again, thanks for checking it out.
5th Apr 2024 4:51pm
Oh I'm blown away by your work. I know you choose words with meticulous care
and I like that. Let's just say it's MEGA inspiring when you critique my work.
We just had a 4.8 earthquake - wild!
and I like that. Let's just say it's MEGA inspiring when you critique my work.
We just had a 4.8 earthquake - wild!
