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Tomorrows Sun
The weightlessness of thought
can actually be heavy
for a body ill an in pain,
Weighing the math
of yesterday & today
what does that equal for tomorrow
shall the sun also rise without me
If so, if so
and if it does
look for me in the rainbow
after the sky sheds her tears
In the name of things that might of been
can actually be heavy
for a body ill an in pain,
Weighing the math
of yesterday & today
what does that equal for tomorrow
shall the sun also rise without me
If so, if so
and if it does
look for me in the rainbow
after the sky sheds her tears
In the name of things that might of been
Published 20th Mar 2024
Author's Note
3 minute write... pic from around 2016, came out fuzzy, but liked it...
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20th Mar 2024 7:50pm
Liked this because tomorrow isn't promised but residual energy is remembrance. Tight
20th Mar 2024 8:08pm
21st Mar 2024 8:41am
21st Mar 2024 2:12pm
Wonderful writing. I actually love everything, especially it's straight forward message, about this poem. I think it's really cool.
22nd Mar 2024 4:43am
24th Mar 2024 7:44am
If I were your editor I would suggest ending this wonderful poem at "rainbow." The last two lines are a bit Norman Rockwell-ish and detract from the brutal and brilliant honesty which precedes it.
Please don't be offended. It's awfully good.
Please don't be offended. It's awfully good.
