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Where Art Thou
Inquiry whispers softly, I implore,
Where does the Divine dwell, what's in store?
In the vast expanse of sky's grand spree,
Or within, a sacred essence, part of me?
Does Existence bloom, or in fragility rest,
A plea for greatness from the heart's crest?
In the cosmic dance, a grand ballet,
A rhythm of questions, in my soul's display.
A design unfolds in the universe's gaze,
Why, and how, my endless maze.
I ponder, wander, in this rhyme,
In the rhythm of questions, a timeless time.
With faith as my guide, a steady chime,
My heart echoes the sacred sublime.
Fragile understanding, a dance divine,
Yet, the grand unfolds in the soul's design.
In the liberation of the soul so free,
I'll comprehend the grand, the mystic decree.
As the rhythm of life continues to shine,
A dance with the Divine, in eternity's line.
Where does the Divine dwell, what's in store?
In the vast expanse of sky's grand spree,
Or within, a sacred essence, part of me?
Does Existence bloom, or in fragility rest,
A plea for greatness from the heart's crest?
In the cosmic dance, a grand ballet,
A rhythm of questions, in my soul's display.
A design unfolds in the universe's gaze,
Why, and how, my endless maze.
I ponder, wander, in this rhyme,
In the rhythm of questions, a timeless time.
With faith as my guide, a steady chime,
My heart echoes the sacred sublime.
Fragile understanding, a dance divine,
Yet, the grand unfolds in the soul's design.
In the liberation of the soul so free,
I'll comprehend the grand, the mystic decree.
As the rhythm of life continues to shine,
A dance with the Divine, in eternity's line.
Published 9th Jan 2024
Author's Note
In crafting "Where Art Thou," I embarked on a poetic journey exploring the timeless inquiry into the nature of the Divine. Through rhythmic verses inspired by the mystic tradition, I delved into the profound questions of existence, the cosmic ballet, and the unwavering rhythm of faith. The title encapsulates the essence of the poem, inviting readers to join me in the contemplative exploration of the divine presence and our place within the grand design. May these verses resonate, sparking reflections on the eternal quest for meaning and connection.
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10th Jan 2024 3:40am
As I have read over various of your ink spills, I have come to the conclusion, you are very attuned into Mother Nature, and you hold the universe in the palms of your hands, intellectually examining it from all angles and then rendering your words to show the ambience of your metaphoric discoveries.
I like this musing inscribed by you, my poet, and please continue to enjoy your late evening.
I like this musing inscribed by you, my poet, and please continue to enjoy your late evening.
10th Jan 2024 4:13am
You use a lot of descriptive elements and are quite flexible with your chosen words. It definitely has the feel of a spiritual poem about someone who is trying to search for the existence of a higher power. My only suggestion would be to get rid of almost all of the punctuation here. Most of it isn't needed and is a little bit distracting with most of the commas. I would keep the commas where it is absolutely necessary for the reader to separate and pause when midline, but they aren't needed at all at the end of your lines.
For example, in your first stanza:
Inquiry whispers softly, I implore
where does the Divine dwell, what's in store?
In the vast expanse of sky's grand spree
or within a sacred essence part of me?
(you could place a comma between 'essence' and 'part' if you want to create an additional pause, but it wouldn't be necessary to still have a good flow with the meter.)
If you are going to use punctuation, I would also consider not capitalizing the beginning of each line and instead only capitalizing where a new sentence starts grammatically.
For example, in your first stanza:
Inquiry whispers softly, I implore
where does the Divine dwell, what's in store?
In the vast expanse of sky's grand spree
or within a sacred essence part of me?
(you could place a comma between 'essence' and 'part' if you want to create an additional pause, but it wouldn't be necessary to still have a good flow with the meter.)
If you are going to use punctuation, I would also consider not capitalizing the beginning of each line and instead only capitalizing where a new sentence starts grammatically.
10th Jan 2024 6:06am
Thanks for the valuable feedback. Appreciate the guidance.
Hopefully it gave you pleasure and good spirit reading it.
Hopefully it gave you pleasure and good spirit reading it.
