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Triolet X 3
Triolet i
I've had my three-score year and ten
will I have strength for any more?
well, those years will not come again,
I've had my three-score year and ten.
All labour and sadness but, then,
dare I reach out and try for four-score
I've had my three-score year and ten
will I have any strength for any more?
Triolet ii
I wish I was a simple dream
never needing to waken up,
knowing nothing of this world's schemes
I wish I was a simple dream,
Not knowing of eternity
needing neither to eat nor sup,
I wish I was a simple dream
never needing to waken up.
Triolet iii
I tasted dead flesh today
but, will I taste it tomorrow
be that as it may
I tasted dead flesh today.
We are what we eat, they say,
now, I savour sorrow,
I tasted dead flesh today
but, will I taste it, tomorrow?
I've had my three-score year and ten
will I have strength for any more?
well, those years will not come again,
I've had my three-score year and ten.
All labour and sadness but, then,
dare I reach out and try for four-score
I've had my three-score year and ten
will I have any strength for any more?
Triolet ii
I wish I was a simple dream
never needing to waken up,
knowing nothing of this world's schemes
I wish I was a simple dream,
Not knowing of eternity
needing neither to eat nor sup,
I wish I was a simple dream
never needing to waken up.
Triolet iii
I tasted dead flesh today
but, will I taste it tomorrow
be that as it may
I tasted dead flesh today.
We are what we eat, they say,
now, I savour sorrow,
I tasted dead flesh today
but, will I taste it, tomorrow?
Published 5th Dec 2023
Author's Note
Triolet i. loosely based on Psalm 90:10 kjv
Triolet ii I could sleep for England & just lurve to dream.
Triolet iii I don't eat red meat, otherwise, everything's fair game.
(i've moved up from the fourth form to the fixed form)
Triolet ii I could sleep for England & just lurve to dream.
Triolet iii I don't eat red meat, otherwise, everything's fair game.
(i've moved up from the fourth form to the fixed form)
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6th Dec 2023 12:31pm
Your poetry sways between plaintive and suggestive
but, i find it too much stuck to the form than the substance as you stress more importance on the Triolet than what it encapsulates within..
Nice poem, form and substance.
but, i find it too much stuck to the form than the substance as you stress more importance on the Triolet than what it encapsulates within..
Nice poem, form and substance.
6th Dec 2023 1:13pm
Thanks for the visit and comment poeticdelight
very useful, but I must say I rather like the fixed form.
I also like to write across only half of this electronic
page and leave proper breaks between sentences,
paragraphs, stanzas or verses.
It's just something that I do.
But all insightful comments are welcome as is
seeing myself through other eyes.
very useful, but I must say I rather like the fixed form.
I also like to write across only half of this electronic
page and leave proper breaks between sentences,
paragraphs, stanzas or verses.
It's just something that I do.
But all insightful comments are welcome as is
seeing myself through other eyes.
Yes, indeed !
we see ourselves thru others who are the echo
of what we pen and do, every one has their own trick, own signature, our slogan,
thanks for the reply.
we see ourselves thru others who are the echo
of what we pen and do, every one has their own trick, own signature, our slogan,
thanks for the reply.
