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amniotic fluid
that was
a
fleeting joy
when I was
in
my
mother's womb.
there is
no memory
of that past joy,
yet it brings
a sparkle to
the eyes
Where
there will be
marks of
the trouble
caused by me
and
no trouble
will have
happened to me
I would
surely have
attained
immense
happiness
in the aura
of that
warm womb water...
a
fleeting joy
when I was
in
my
mother's womb.
there is
no memory
of that past joy,
yet it brings
a sparkle to
the eyes
Where
there will be
marks of
the trouble
caused by me
and
no trouble
will have
happened to me
I would
surely have
attained
immense
happiness
in the aura
of that
warm womb water...
Published 1st Nov 2023
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1st Nov 2023 8:55am
1st Nov 2023 10:46am
1st Nov 2023 3:27pm
words crafted in astute observation
the innocents of that love...
an unadulterated joy.
enjoyed the write
the innocents of that love...
an unadulterated joy.
enjoyed the write
1st Nov 2023 4:30pm
1st Nov 2023 4:13pm
Beautifully written. Such joy can never be attained once we leave the womb because at that moment the death clock starts. Excellent poem
1st Nov 2023 5:16pm
Absolutely right... Still the journey from life to death is very beautiful... quite durational with full of trouble and full of happiness.. Well many thanks for reading..
Anonymous
1st Nov 2023 9:13pm
Perhaps the last time we'll know true peace - in the womb. Beautiful
2nd Nov 2023 3:32am
1st Nov 2023 9:25pm
Good imaginative piece. Mothers have experienced pregnancy's discomforts will surely relate to this verse:
Where
there will be
marks of
the trouble
caused by me
and
no trouble
will have
happened to me
Where
there will be
marks of
the trouble
caused by me
and
no trouble
will have
happened to me
2nd Nov 2023 3:32am
1st Nov 2023 10:21pm
The joys of your mother's womb. The world has changed and we create our own happiness. Keep on writing.
2nd Nov 2023 3:33am
3rd Nov 2023 8:30am
Where we are protected from all harm :) Interesting piece, very clever and creative. Well done my friend! :)
4th Nov 2023 4:46am
