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Assuming the risk
There she was, quite asleep
What a beauty
A few brave ones dared go near
But never toooo near
For her breath stank like a sewer tank
Not even the offered pot of gold
Would entice anyone to go for the kiss
Until the unwelcome miserly Jean
Used a Vic-vaporub like substance
Under his nose, gently kissed
And thus got the girl and the gold.
What a beauty
A few brave ones dared go near
But never toooo near
For her breath stank like a sewer tank
Not even the offered pot of gold
Would entice anyone to go for the kiss
Until the unwelcome miserly Jean
Used a Vic-vaporub like substance
Under his nose, gently kissed
And thus got the girl and the gold.
Published 30th Jul 2023
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30th Jul 2023 8:07pm
An amusing comic poem with a nice allusion to “She Walks in Beauty” by Lord Byron at the start. Thank you for the read.
31st Jul 2023 5:25pm
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31st Jul 2023 5:32pm
Soooo, i have to ask, we know now he will probably never kiss her again right? Soooo...he was after the gold only? Lol
31st Jul 2023 5:42pm
To be bold and go for the gold. Will he kiss again her again? Most likely not. But now that she is fully awake there may certainly be other ways to please her........... Regards, (and kisses), Robert.
Anonymous
31st Jul 2023 5:44pm
Hahaha! Okay! Well enough! Good write Robert!
20th Aug 2023 11:52pm
Yeah, bad breath will certainly change the mood.
Nicely done robert, it certainly is a twist for a fairy tale.
Nicely done robert, it certainly is a twist for a fairy tale.
