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reductive
The box grows
increasingly
smaller
and your
passive
convenience
has plugged
the air holes
I’ve dessicated
the most vibrant
parts
(of me)
to
fit
I sigh
fold
the
husk
into the box
and hold
my chest
still
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Re. reductive
24th Jul 2023 2:22pm
How did you know the story of my life?
I like the delicate way you told the pain.
I like the delicate way you told the pain.
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Re: Re. reductive
2nd Aug 2023 8:16pm
YAAAAAASSSSS SIR! That is the shit. Fall all the fuck out!
Your nerd made me fan myself.
You nailed the ambiguity and structure. I wanted it to drip to a close, you know?
I see what you mean -- that I COULD rip out the guts and just leave the head and feet. But I wanted to say it directly, and not obtusely. That was the only part I didn't want to leave for interpretation... sooo... the art suffers because of artist ego. Again. BAH!
Hey, thanks. I appreciate your review so damn much. Be well!
Your nerd made me fan myself.
You nailed the ambiguity and structure. I wanted it to drip to a close, you know?
I see what you mean -- that I COULD rip out the guts and just leave the head and feet. But I wanted to say it directly, and not obtusely. That was the only part I didn't want to leave for interpretation... sooo... the art suffers because of artist ego. Again. BAH!
Hey, thanks. I appreciate your review so damn much. Be well!
Re. reductive
2nd Aug 2023 5:59am
Dear B,
This piece, for me, completely captures my own lack of self. To this very moment I continue to measure my self worth on everything but myself and what I do to receive “love”. 😔
This has touched my soul. H🌷
This piece, for me, completely captures my own lack of self. To this very moment I continue to measure my self worth on everything but myself and what I do to receive “love”. 😔
This has touched my soul. H🌷
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2nd Aug 2023 8:18pm
Fucking hell, Hon. I only lose my sense of self in love. It's the worst fucking virus on the planet.
Why the fuck do we define ourselves based on someone's ability to show up the way we need? We're amazing, and we show up for ourselves.
I love the idea of love. So damn much. I love the dainty sweet bullshit. Fuck I hate the way my synapses cross and my neurons backfire and I just get fucked up on the shit. I should take up something safer, like meth.
Hey girl. Love you. Thank you!
Why the fuck do we define ourselves based on someone's ability to show up the way we need? We're amazing, and we show up for ourselves.
I love the idea of love. So damn much. I love the dainty sweet bullshit. Fuck I hate the way my synapses cross and my neurons backfire and I just get fucked up on the shit. I should take up something safer, like meth.
Hey girl. Love you. Thank you!
Re. reductive
3rd Aug 2023 2:59am
Outstanding. Sometimes your writes like this are on a whole higher level. It's like you're sitting at a chair, staring over at whatever/whoever is causing your thoughts to hone in so much to the bone. Precision write, Betty.
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