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Caught in memory
As I walked to work I picked up a rose that begged to be sniffed. Delicious in it's innocence I was overwhelmed with a sense of security. My childhood came rushing back in an instant. Back to a time before I knew of betrayal, lies and deceit. Nature is nurturing to the innocent. At it's worst a thorn can not spread a rumour. Water is sustenance. My email serves as a contradiction to my existence. Paperless billing is a demon disguised as a child who fills a room with laughter. As an adult I see the rose for what it truly was, is and will be. A rose is a reminder of a life I don't deserve nor want, but need.
Published 16th Jul 2023
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16th Jul 2023 7:09pm
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16th Jul 2023 9:09pm
Very sensual and aesthetical, but not in an over-indulgent or sinful way. You use the metaphor of the rose as a direct connotation to memory, which smell is very powerful in. Nice depiction. I can almost visualize as I read, into my own disposition. It's great that your moral compass to this metaphor is "innocent", as you put it. When you compare and contrast feelings and emotions with other objects of other environments, it puts the power of a rose into context. That's a sort of justice from nature to you, and to nature, from you, heh. Your descriptions seem to be from experience, which I would assume is why you make such a good point in your philosophy here. It is good that subtle, simple things in nature can remind the conscience that all of life isn't corrupt, evil, and/or torment. Anyway, again, you did a pretty good job. Thanks for sharing.
16th Jul 2023 9:13pm
I appreciate that. Every time you comment on my work I feel that I am better than I actually am. I've never been able to break anything down the way you can. I appreciate you commenting on my stuff.
16th Jul 2023 10:14pm
Wow! This was great. I love the nostalgia of childhood is compared to the harshness of the world. The way you used the rose. One thing I will say is we all " need", but you do deserve. I see profound improvement. Bravo.
16th Jul 2023 10:22pm
