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i had a friend once who wanted me to build him a bar
unfortunately we stayed drunk
he didn’t buy any wood
i had no tools
and occasionally we got stoned
but all in all it was a very good idea
unfortunately we stayed drunk
he didn’t buy any wood
i had no tools
and occasionally we got stoned
but all in all it was a very good idea
Published 22nd Jun 2023
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23rd Jun 2023 9:28am
Dear AJ,
It was a good plan. This made me remember as a teen, a friend and I were going to conquer the singing world but she couldn’t stand crowds and I can’t sing. We did have sell out crowds in our living rooms with the neighbor kids though. I really enjoyed this piece. Totally gives your fan base a peek into another side and style of your incredible writing. H🌷
It was a good plan. This made me remember as a teen, a friend and I were going to conquer the singing world but she couldn’t stand crowds and I can’t sing. We did have sell out crowds in our living rooms with the neighbor kids though. I really enjoyed this piece. Totally gives your fan base a peek into another side and style of your incredible writing. H🌷
23rd Jun 2023 10:59am
I particularly good giggle 🤭 @ your theme of #LifeGoals. Looking back, I'm sure we all have fodder for amusement... somewhere in our timelines...
Thanks for the morning chuckle, J
🌹B
Thanks for the morning chuckle, J
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23rd Jun 2023 11:30pm
5th Jul 2023 8:46am
Your poem captures a sense of nostalgia and lightheartedness. It reflects on a friendship and a shared idea of building a bar, even though the practical aspects were not fully realized.
5th Jul 2023 9:03am
Once upon a time I was self medicated with all the good intentions in the world but too stoned to see them through 😂
