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Bondage (for Devilish's 'Candy Drug' competition)
I have a dirty secret.
I enjoy being
TIED UP
And sometimes,
bLiNdFoLdEd
or
WhIpPeD.
Bite my skin,
draw my
BLOOD
and make me feel
again.
Make me
CrAvE
again.
Sweet leather,
the ball gag is
a piece of
CANDY,
making my mouth
sAlIvAtE
so heavily in desire
and EAGERNESS.
I'll share my dirty
SeCrEt
with you
if you promise to make it
HuRt So GoOd
I enjoy being
TIED UP
And sometimes,
bLiNdFoLdEd
or
WhIpPeD.
Bite my skin,
draw my
BLOOD
and make me feel
again.
Make me
CrAvE
again.
Sweet leather,
the ball gag is
a piece of
CANDY,
making my mouth
sAlIvAtE
so heavily in desire
and EAGERNESS.
I'll share my dirty
SeCrEt
with you
if you promise to make it
HuRt So GoOd
Published 17th Apr 2012
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I really like this poem...especially in regards to the competition...the only thing I would critique is when you change from capital to lowercase letters in the same word, it takes away from the poem...this is just my opinion...then again, I guess if you are trying to say that you are a little crazy/rabid for this "candy drug", that would drive home the point...either way, I like the poem itself...good job :)
17th Apr 2012 4:58am
Thank you very much. (: And yes, I know it takes away the visual appeal a bit when switching capitalization in a single word, but as you guessed, the point was to seem primal and ravenous. (:
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4th May 2013 5:50pm
Interesting like how u would change from capitalization gives the poem emphasize!
10th Jul 2013 11:00pm
Thank you, it was meant to show the instability of the person's mind in that moment. (:
