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it still hurts
She lingered and lingered,
Like blocks her words hit me,
She kept throwing them,
It built a bridge for me.
Now that I've crossed over,
Would you not drag me
Into your world?
Away from the light
In darkness foretold.
I fixed the broken thoughts
And read between the lines,
You broke one more thought
And with you I did dine.
I'm just a soul
Whose intentions are good
It still hurts a bit,
That you misunderstood
Like blocks her words hit me,
She kept throwing them,
It built a bridge for me.
Now that I've crossed over,
Would you not drag me
Into your world?
Away from the light
In darkness foretold.
I fixed the broken thoughts
And read between the lines,
You broke one more thought
And with you I did dine.
I'm just a soul
Whose intentions are good
It still hurts a bit,
That you misunderstood
Published 16th Apr 2012
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16th Apr 2012 1:50pm
16th Apr 2012 7:52pm
Wow, this is incredible, it shows mixed feelings so brilliantly, I hope that was what was meant lol!!!!!!!!!!!
16th Apr 2012 10:05pm
9th May 2012 00:13am
I like your poetry. But you seem to use images of darkness and light over and over. To me, this way of writing has become rather trivial. In fact I don't know what they mean, since they have so many meanings. "It's just a soul whose intentions are good" are the words of a song. But perhaps you didn't know that. Why would I want to "drag you into my world?" Why do you want to escape into something which is not right in front of you? Maybe my world is not as "dark" as the poem suggests. I do like your poetry very much, but I find something, lacking, not being said, mythic and "mystical."
These are all qualities of great poetry, but I find a bit of inconsistency in some of your work. That's ok. I just wondered if it is intentional or if I am wrong.
Marcella1
These are all qualities of great poetry, but I find a bit of inconsistency in some of your work. That's ok. I just wondered if it is intentional or if I am wrong.
Marcella1
They are permanent lines drawn in life- Darkness and Light, Even and Odd, Evil and Good. And others like it...
And yea, they can't be fully understood, they all give out a thousand meanings but in the end;
One conceals Grace and the other reveals it...
As for the music part- It is coincidence.
So I'm indifferent to the fact.
To escape into something that is not right in front of you, dear mercella, is what, I think, is called faith.
-To calculate from the past, the future and then hold on to it.
You observe quite well. Yea, they are intentional. I dislike some of what I write. I look at them as I look at empty bottles.
They serve a purpose to me though- they let out a bit of steam, you know..
Your comments are always insightful mercella1.
I read them in appreciation..
And yea, they can't be fully understood, they all give out a thousand meanings but in the end;
One conceals Grace and the other reveals it...
As for the music part- It is coincidence.
So I'm indifferent to the fact.
To escape into something that is not right in front of you, dear mercella, is what, I think, is called faith.
-To calculate from the past, the future and then hold on to it.
You observe quite well. Yea, they are intentional. I dislike some of what I write. I look at them as I look at empty bottles.
They serve a purpose to me though- they let out a bit of steam, you know..
Your comments are always insightful mercella1.
I read them in appreciation..
17th May 2013 4:44pm
