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Broken Charm
Your fuzzy veins are my yarn.
Entangle me in your arms.
My soul spell-bound and hungered
for your charms.
Never-ever saw the alarm.
Your blinding smile and electric eyes
disarm.
Swirling in ecstasy's swarm.
A thousand nights long you kept
me warm.
A thousand and one, you were gone.......
Entangle me in your arms.
My soul spell-bound and hungered
for your charms.
Never-ever saw the alarm.
Your blinding smile and electric eyes
disarm.
Swirling in ecstasy's swarm.
A thousand nights long you kept
me warm.
A thousand and one, you were gone.......
Published 1st Jun 2023
Author's Note
Yes I know yarn doesn't rhyme with arm, lol. Or gone.
Just having fun with rhyme.
Just having fun with rhyme.
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1st Jun 2023 12:37pm
Wonderful write... (actually "yarn" and "arm" are an example of slant rhyme.... used extensively by Emily Dickinson)... really enjoyed the crispness of this...
1st Jun 2023 12:40pm
Funny you say that, another writer told me they liked my slant rhyme, I had to look it up, lol.
I'm glad you liked it. ❤️
I'm glad you liked it. ❤️
1st Jun 2023 1:53pm
1st Jun 2023 3:00pm
1st Jun 2023 3:58pm
This is rather conceptual in its use of metaphor. I can really picture the meaning of emotion you convey with a visualized example in my mind. Thanks for sharing.
1st Jun 2023 4:35pm
1st Jun 2023 6:47pm
You write with what I call "closure of charm." I am not a comment flea, wanting to itch your back,
but you have a gizmo attached to your pen. I enjoy your world of words.
but you have a gizmo attached to your pen. I enjoy your world of words.
1st Jun 2023 8:08pm
8th Jun 2023 00:07am
The words all seem to rhyme, my dear to my ear, if you've had a few like me. Anyway, they're near enough, as I like to say! I like the way you stuck with the earthier approach here rather than opting for polished perfection! There's something to be said for this realism. Boy, don't I talk a lot of shit! No shit. I mean it ;-)
8th Jun 2023 8:42am
Hi. I'm glad you did talk shit, lol.
It was really nice what you said.
Thank you!
It was really nice what you said.
Thank you!
10th Jun 2023 1:24am
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