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We Kissed
We kissed. We kissed again.
We made up for the years apart.
But shall I tell you now what I remember best?
It’s this:
How when we met, you drew so slowly close,
to come to me,
your aim at first
to only soft my lips with yours,
and fall your mouth, in stilling snowflake’s touch,
in cool and ling’ring gentleness on mine,
and how you paused, drew in a breath, and then,
with new intent to make me ache to drink in all of you,
let slyness sparkle in your eyes.
We made up for the years apart.
But shall I tell you now what I remember best?
It’s this:
How when we met, you drew so slowly close,
to come to me,
your aim at first
to only soft my lips with yours,
and fall your mouth, in stilling snowflake’s touch,
in cool and ling’ring gentleness on mine,
and how you paused, drew in a breath, and then,
with new intent to make me ache to drink in all of you,
let slyness sparkle in your eyes.
Published 25th May 2023
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26th May 2023 12:59pm
Dear Baldwin,
"to come to me
your aim at first
to only soft my lips with yours,"
Baldwin, to only soft or SOFTEN?
"to come to me
your aim at first
to only soft my lips with yours,"
Baldwin, to only soft or SOFTEN?
poetic usage. I'm surprised you didn't see that since you are someone who says that not all details need to be spelled out in poetry.
26th May 2023 2:26pm
When you use it, it is a poetic usage, but when used by others, it's a terrible mistake.
When I use what? How can one use no details?
Did you not understand what I was saying [i.e., to kiss softely]? Is "to soft" grammatically unsound as a verbal expression and conceptually obtuse?
If so, please demonstrate how and why this is so.
And while you are doing this, write something that is actually evocatively romantic in wording and tone. Show us you know how to use words properly and in ways that dazzle a reader.
Did you not understand what I was saying [i.e., to kiss softely]? Is "to soft" grammatically unsound as a verbal expression and conceptually obtuse?
If so, please demonstrate how and why this is so.
And while you are doing this, write something that is actually evocatively romantic in wording and tone. Show us you know how to use words properly and in ways that dazzle a reader.
