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Untitled XIV
Eyelids are heavy, drowning
in fatigue, unrelenting.
Time ticks slowly into
darker depths of evening
fire, wrapped around
wispy fibers stretching
out through atmosphere
and filament.
No escape from flickering
light still pushing shoulders
above a dying sky.
Transitional mood settles
itself within vibrational being,
veins burning hot under
oak sway, sodden earth
consuming fragile eyes.
in fatigue, unrelenting.
Time ticks slowly into
darker depths of evening
fire, wrapped around
wispy fibers stretching
out through atmosphere
and filament.
No escape from flickering
light still pushing shoulders
above a dying sky.
Transitional mood settles
itself within vibrational being,
veins burning hot under
oak sway, sodden earth
consuming fragile eyes.
Published 15th Apr 2023
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15th Apr 2023 4:13am
Dear E,
The first stanza describes perfectly how I look trying to write these poems every day! And it all starts out so promising. Fifteen minutes into the process I want to set fire to the computer!
Your poem, however, is actual poetry.
I bow down in admiration. H🌷
The first stanza describes perfectly how I look trying to write these poems every day! And it all starts out so promising. Fifteen minutes into the process I want to set fire to the computer!
Your poem, however, is actual poetry.
I bow down in admiration. H🌷
15th Apr 2023 4:23am
You have fantastic poetic instincts Eerie...
One thing...
Would like to see what kind of title you come up with...
:)
One thing...
Would like to see what kind of title you come up with...
:)
15th Apr 2023 2:12pm
15th Apr 2023 4:30pm
Wonderfully captured, Eerie. And cozy while reading it. Most the times, I like being soothed from a read. This works well for that.
15th Apr 2023 4:34pm
22nd May 2023 7:13pm
The sentiment along with the words seem to jump out of the page (or screen).
Great work.
Great work.
