Yes

beautiful! I've been exactly this so many times! :D

Thanks. I hope nobody else has written one similar. I just took a piss, wrote it in my head and had it on the site in 5 minutes. Never wrote anything so fast and obvious before.

I do that all the time. you might think I've put a lot of thought and taken much time in writing my work... but most/all of it is just on the spot creations. like, "lets write a poem." and baam! poem ready.

This poem reminds me of a joke by Scottish comedian Frankie Boyle: He was driving home one night when he saw a man pissing against a front door. The man then took out his keys and went inside.
A neat little comic poem. The misdirection employed is fabulous. Not sure it needs a content warning, though. I think that's meant to be used in cases of poems which feature extreme sex and violence.

Thanks Jack. The content warning is all part of the comic misdirection.

yeah, aye been dabbling in that mysElf here. Ye should put this'n in "erotic".......there's a terrible shortage of categories here. eye can think of at least 100 more that would be poignantly pertinent....

an'other fine 'portrait' of a moment....

hard2believe there's a 1/4century tween 'now' & my acting out as depicted in y'our one-act play..

as all ways: [w]rite on, 'kid', &, oyeah
BTW: eye 4give ye !!

Two act play. I'm pissing AND moaning.Thanks for the forgiveness. I wasn't really drunk when I wrote it, but had really just taken an overdue wizz, and thought back on drunker times and thought about how I'd done this and heard this a thousand times, but never thought it strange for a guy in a public room to be moaning and sighing while he was holding onto the Commander in Chief.  I'd already comically misdirected myself and just had to write it down.

nuthin like
thee hiss
o'thee piss,
eh
miss?

The best things in life are vulgar. And free. Your little poem makes deeper connections than you perhaps realize. Liked it.  Red

Thanks Red. I value your comment much. Though I wrote it fast, I knew it was primal & common enough to work out, with a quick polishing.

This is hilarious. With the "extreme content" and the first few lines, it was like you were playing a big joke on all of us. I love that! I also like the vulgarity of the poem, how it starts of as vulgar because you'd think it was about sex but it remains vulgar even after you realize it's just a drunk guy relieving himself. Great job.

Yes I did. I had my little joke and pissed all over. The apology was almost sincere.

That was awesome. Like, the buildup, and the OH SHIT ending. The ending was effing brilliant after that buildup.

Damn well done, Bragg!

Oh thank you Betty. I knew it was bawdy and cynical enough for your liking and it had moaning, penises, apologies... just a little pile of your favorite themes.  

It's like you can read my mind, Bragg!

Had you wrapped it in bacon, I would have married this fucking poem.

But you didn't. So I'm driving by.

Write more, butthead.

Rofl! That was amazing. Truely well written. I laughed my ass off at the end. And I agree the 'content disclaimer' does give the poem an extra edge :D

Thank you, glad to satisfy yet another poet with my pee. Livin the R Kelley dream.

Haha this was epic. Lol

Thanks girl. Come on back to the DUP.

yeah! ok this is brilliant, "head thrown forward" and some may have a thing for forearms... so that was definitely an interesting build-up and such a sweet let-down that i had to smile.  

and

"Thank you, glad to satisfy yet another poet with my pee. Livin the R Kelley dream."

just adds to the flava. :D

Thanks jesta. It is a mixed feeling when my primal little pee poem pleases a woman as lovely as yourself.

simple pleasures, Bragg, simple pleasures. [:

And I love it when people recognize the simple pleasures. Joy to see your new face down here, chameleon.

How come this is labeled "extreme"? Seems normal to me!
Nice write, love that you turned a drunken piss into a symbolic portrait. AWESOME!

Yes, good catch. It was an added bit of misdirection. It masquerades as a sexual act until the last line. All part of the humor. At least I thought it was. Now that I think on it again, maybe this guy really is having sex and he's so drunk that he accidentally takes a piss inside of someone. Then he really does have to ask forgiveness. Then this really is extreme. Nah, just kidding. Just a little humor showing how related and primal our urges can be. Thanks for stopping in and for the kind word.

very good

much thanks