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Husk
I just need to numb the pain.
Amber elixir
or ceramic white powder
Sins of the soulless
You’re my saviour
When all hope feels lost
Didn’t I say that?
With tissues, red stains
O, how I waver
As senses burn out
How can I stay here
These collapsing lungs
Ill-gotten behaviour
And years become decades
The haze has no flavour
My tastes have been scorched-
Pointless nomenclature
For the five I had at first
Have whittled away
My eyes cannot see,
Sounds dampen and fray
Hands grasp at air
Bloody nose, caked key
When the white has rotted away
All vision of me.
I wonder,
which is first
Liver or rope
My eyes,
the sounds-
the sadness.
Disappear,
with hope.
Published 3rd Apr 2023
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Powerful, aching and truly consequential with every line screaming out for relief. To me, this is how some poetry should absolutely feel.... kudos!
I hope that relief eventually did come for you, my friend.
At some some point in lives, we humans all have had enormous trials and tribulations of a personal nature. Ones that each of us might've chosen to face either privately or with open, public access. So, with that in mind, this is an epicenter of relatable conveyed pain and suffering that's penned of your truth with such immensely effective heft, that it's impossible not to be moved....not to understand.
I look forward to each and every poem, because I've probably felt something similar at some point. You're not alone, I hear you.
Take care of yourself, dear one.
I'll always be keeping my eye out -
🌹 💙
B
I hope that relief eventually did come for you, my friend.
At some some point in lives, we humans all have had enormous trials and tribulations of a personal nature. Ones that each of us might've chosen to face either privately or with open, public access. So, with that in mind, this is an epicenter of relatable conveyed pain and suffering that's penned of your truth with such immensely effective heft, that it's impossible not to be moved....not to understand.
I look forward to each and every poem, because I've probably felt something similar at some point. You're not alone, I hear you.
Take care of yourself, dear one.
I'll always be keeping my eye out -
🌹 💙
B
4th Apr 2023 10:16am
Thank you so much, Bluevelvete, your words always soothe the sorrow.
I'm trying to be more active on here, and to engage more with other people's work. You have inspired me.
I'm trying to be more active on here, and to engage more with other people's work. You have inspired me.
4th Apr 2023 10:32am
Yesss!
I do hope you're able, it's totally worth it and I feel helps with your own writing, in the end.
Take it slow and work up to participating more and more...
Good luck 🤞🏻
🌹 💙
I do hope you're able, it's totally worth it and I feel helps with your own writing, in the end.
Take it slow and work up to participating more and more...
Good luck 🤞🏻
🌹 💙
4th Apr 2023 7:43pm
