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UNSEEN BUT TRUSTWORTHY
UNSEEN BUT TRUSTWORTHY
I love the people all as they
are hopeless and don't know their way.
They look for something that gives hope
but find in front what yields despair.
They are the flock who are quite lost.
They're far from home, and it is dusk.
They pray for someone who can lead
their stumbling footsteps ere it's dark.
They seek a shepherd they can see,
but none lives there except some wolves.
They direct them to their dark cave
to slay and eat, then lick their blood.
The shepherd that gives them repose
is unseen and lives in their hearts.
They should hark deep to hear His voice;
His words will render them quite charmed.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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I love the people all as they
are hopeless and don't know their way.
They look for something that gives hope
but find in front what yields despair.
They are the flock who are quite lost.
They're far from home, and it is dusk.
They pray for someone who can lead
their stumbling footsteps ere it's dark.
They seek a shepherd they can see,
but none lives there except some wolves.
They direct them to their dark cave
to slay and eat, then lick their blood.
The shepherd that gives them repose
is unseen and lives in their hearts.
They should hark deep to hear His voice;
His words will render them quite charmed.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 22nd Feb 2023
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22nd Feb 2023 9:32pm
I am a much strayed sheep
beset by savage wolves
who wish to ravage and to tear
apart my flesh.
And lost and helpless as I am
I know despair.
My pressing need
is for a shepherd who delivers me from harm
not one who leaves me to my fate
but charmed.
beset by savage wolves
who wish to ravage and to tear
apart my flesh.
And lost and helpless as I am
I know despair.
My pressing need
is for a shepherd who delivers me from harm
not one who leaves me to my fate
but charmed.
12th Mar 2023 3:29pm
Joseph, this is the perfect depiction why we shouldn't judge but try to be merciful As Jesus! Because people are quite confused and lost ... no point in it... better try to give a good example by following Jesus' steps!
A savior who only makes one "very pleased or attracted by [his] charm'
(https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/english/charmed)
when what one needs is deliverance from being fatally harmed by an animal or an enemy is not someone whose steps are worth following.
And this piece is hardly a "depiction" of something Jesus did that shows why we should not judge anyone, let alone that all men are led astray.
Besides that Jesus is frequently depicted by the Gospel authors as engaging in judgment and condemnation: The picture you have of who Jesus was in his lifetime is, like J-Z's, woefully uninformed Biblically and raised from who you want him to be, not from the whole range of evidence of who he was and what he was like given to us in the Gospels
(https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/english/charmed)
when what one needs is deliverance from being fatally harmed by an animal or an enemy is not someone whose steps are worth following.
And this piece is hardly a "depiction" of something Jesus did that shows why we should not judge anyone, let alone that all men are led astray.
Besides that Jesus is frequently depicted by the Gospel authors as engaging in judgment and condemnation: The picture you have of who Jesus was in his lifetime is, like J-Z's, woefully uninformed Biblically and raised from who you want him to be, not from the whole range of evidence of who he was and what he was like given to us in the Gospels
13th Mar 2023 6:35pm
Very dear Boyana,
Thank you very much for your great encouragement, which l appreciate very highly. Jesus is everything in my life, and He is my only hope. I am completely desperate without Him because He gives meaning to people's lives through His resurrection. He came to tell us that we will have the same way. However, l am not against criticism. I support it and encourage all the poets to criticize me. Thank you again, dear Boyana.
Thank you very much for your great encouragement, which l appreciate very highly. Jesus is everything in my life, and He is my only hope. I am completely desperate without Him because He gives meaning to people's lives through His resurrection. He came to tell us that we will have the same way. However, l am not against criticism. I support it and encourage all the poets to criticize me. Thank you again, dear Boyana.
Who or what Jesus is to you is irrelevant when the issue is whether or not your piece is well-written poetry.
Moreover, neither Boyana.nor you have, in your replies, dealt with the issue of how the shepherd you present here -- one who, instead of delivering his sheep from mortal danger, "charms" them -- is not worth following. Charming is not rescuing.
And this:
"l am not against criticism. I support it and encourage all the [??"] poets [which ones] to criticize me."
is risible.
As your response to actual criticism of the way you write and to how it is correctly pointed out how often you do not say what you think you have said shows, all you will accept is adulation
Moreover, neither Boyana.nor you have, in your replies, dealt with the issue of how the shepherd you present here -- one who, instead of delivering his sheep from mortal danger, "charms" them -- is not worth following. Charming is not rescuing.
And this:
"l am not against criticism. I support it and encourage all the [??"] poets [which ones] to criticize me."
is risible.
As your response to actual criticism of the way you write and to how it is correctly pointed out how often you do not say what you think you have said shows, all you will accept is adulation
