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Here comes the Sun
I need to know before I'm gone
That love don't leave those welts
Your hand in mine
Would've been just fine
Without the leather of belts
Here comes the rain
Comes falling down
Make brown turn green
Love spoiled straight to mean
Can we wash this dirty clean
Something I've ever been
Here comes the rain
Grey skies all
Words meant to cut
Words to shine
Like a hook to a line
Shining till I close my mouth
Pulling me in
Reeling me in
See the blood drip from my lip
Here we go
Blow upon blow
Nothing left to say
My conscience sways
Up on your rawhide rope
Here comes the rain
Keeps pouring down
Wash away the doubt and shame
Those clouds are your's
And now I know
You can carry this the rest of the way
Here comes the sun!
That love don't leave those welts
Your hand in mine
Would've been just fine
Without the leather of belts
Here comes the rain
Comes falling down
Make brown turn green
Love spoiled straight to mean
Can we wash this dirty clean
Something I've ever been
Here comes the rain
Grey skies all
Words meant to cut
Words to shine
Like a hook to a line
Shining till I close my mouth
Pulling me in
Reeling me in
See the blood drip from my lip
Here we go
Blow upon blow
Nothing left to say
My conscience sways
Up on your rawhide rope
Here comes the rain
Keeps pouring down
Wash away the doubt and shame
Those clouds are your's
And now I know
You can carry this the rest of the way
Here comes the sun!
Published 19th Feb 2023
| Edited 15th Jul 2023
Author's Note
This is about overcoming as well as deciding to go another way. To take the power for your own good.
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20th Feb 2023 5:59pm
Powerful start continuing all the way through to justify your A. N.
(perhaps a missed E on the penultimate ' here' ? although it could be just ' her' ?
(perhaps a missed E on the penultimate ' here' ? although it could be just ' her' ?
20th Feb 2023 6:07pm
21st Feb 2023 3:41pm
Dear Bat,
I appreciate the strength in this write. Moving away from things that are not meant for you is vulnerable and courageous. Indeed...here comes the sun!
A quote for thought...
"Your value doesn't decrease based on someone's inability to see your worth."
Bless
Mel
I appreciate the strength in this write. Moving away from things that are not meant for you is vulnerable and courageous. Indeed...here comes the sun!
A quote for thought...
"Your value doesn't decrease based on someone's inability to see your worth."
Bless
Mel
21st Feb 2023 4:29pm
I wrote this and used it for a speech I did for foster and adoptive parents. I thought I bombed it. A parent that was there came up to me about a year later and told me that it gave him a different perspective on his task as a parent of a displaced child. I think if I can tap into the pain I get to paint hope to the future.
Thank you
Bat
Thank you
Bat
21st Feb 2023 5:36pm
The syntax of this was odd at times, but I kind of enjoyed that. There’s a rawness and yet a positivity to the poem that I vibe with.
21st Feb 2023 5:43pm
