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Miss Alice
Hi Miss Alice
What colorful dreams dance behind those eyes?
Painting your world with color
and filling your throat with lies?
Do they make you feel well?
Have you faded into Hell?
Don't you have anything to tell?
Don't you have a soul you can sell?
I miss her, Miss Alice
She left me alone in the dark.
After taking up her knife and driving it
right into my heart.
O, Miss Alice, are you bleeding?
Has your sin become a seedling?
Is it attention you're needing?
Now that your demons are done feeding?
I need you, Miss Alice
Your porcelain flesh is so nice.
It draws me in so close,
and it truly does entice.
I'm, I'm losing it,
The small sanity that remains,
You throw a fist and you hit
My heart, shattering it like it was before you came.
Oh Miss Alice.
Miss Alice.
Alice.
What colorful dreams dance behind those eyes?
Painting your world with color
and filling your throat with lies?
Do they make you feel well?
Have you faded into Hell?
Don't you have anything to tell?
Don't you have a soul you can sell?
I miss her, Miss Alice
She left me alone in the dark.
After taking up her knife and driving it
right into my heart.
O, Miss Alice, are you bleeding?
Has your sin become a seedling?
Is it attention you're needing?
Now that your demons are done feeding?
I need you, Miss Alice
Your porcelain flesh is so nice.
It draws me in so close,
and it truly does entice.
I'm, I'm losing it,
The small sanity that remains,
You throw a fist and you hit
My heart, shattering it like it was before you came.
Oh Miss Alice.
Miss Alice.
Alice.
Published 2nd Apr 2012
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2nd Apr 2012 1:14am
This has such a wonderful flow and lyrical quality. A lovely little story in there as well. :)
One suggestion. In the third verse, first line, I thought at first read that there was a word missing. Maybe "I miss my Alice" as a substitute.
Great poem Cinny.
One suggestion. In the third verse, first line, I thought at first read that there was a word missing. Maybe "I miss my Alice" as a substitute.
Great poem Cinny.
2nd Apr 2012 1:16am
Thank you for the feedback!
I just read that section of the poem and I see exactly what you mean, doesn't flow all that well into that stanza, thanks for that. (:
I just read that section of the poem and I see exactly what you mean, doesn't flow all that well into that stanza, thanks for that. (:
Anonymous
2nd Apr 2012 1:17pm
This poem is well written, easy to read which usually demonstrates that the poet has worked very hard on her grammar, spelling, etc....
Good work
Write on!
Kitty
Good work
Write on!
Kitty
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