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The Well
Poem Ver.?
It's a lonesome place
dimlit forest fields
blue-light
grey in the night
a warmth deep within
forms a bubble
that keeps growing
They grow cold
with each drop of devastation
splishing and splashing
on a verge to burst
instead it pours
a steady stream
dripping down gentle cheeks
a defeated heart
a worn out mind
The water overflows, fighting gravity
A silent well
in a dimlit night
(a shadowed mind)
~song ver. ~?
What a lonely night!
Oh, it's alright!
You're right, I'll survive
Sky is grey in the dimlit sky
Bluelight, moonlight
All is just right
Feel the warmth
(so soothing)
Fear the heat
(so numbing)
Feel it bubble
Fear it stumble
Oh, the struggle!
Deep within, it keeps growing
Deep within, keep wondering
(Will it burst, will it burst?)
With each drop of devastation
On the verge, of suffocation
Pouring and pouring
Instead, it's streaming
Down a gentle cheek
Down a defeated heart
A worn out hope
I cry
What a lonely night!
Oh, it's alright!
You're right, I'll survive
It's a lonesome place
dimlit forest fields
blue-light
grey in the night
a warmth deep within
forms a bubble
that keeps growing
They grow cold
with each drop of devastation
splishing and splashing
on a verge to burst
instead it pours
a steady stream
dripping down gentle cheeks
a defeated heart
a worn out mind
The water overflows, fighting gravity
A silent well
in a dimlit night
(a shadowed mind)
~song ver. ~?
What a lonely night!
Oh, it's alright!
You're right, I'll survive
Sky is grey in the dimlit sky
Bluelight, moonlight
All is just right
Feel the warmth
(so soothing)
Fear the heat
(so numbing)
Feel it bubble
Fear it stumble
Oh, the struggle!
Deep within, it keeps growing
Deep within, keep wondering
(Will it burst, will it burst?)
With each drop of devastation
On the verge, of suffocation
Pouring and pouring
Instead, it's streaming
Down a gentle cheek
Down a defeated heart
A worn out hope
I cry
What a lonely night!
Oh, it's alright!
You're right, I'll survive
Published 27th Sep 2022
Author's Note
Emotions are my strongest inspiration,
I believe that sometimes when I feel lonely, reading or hearing songs that sings of beautiful loneliness is like a lullaby to a wounded heart.
Here's my attempt to make beautiful lyrics!
:)
I believe that sometimes when I feel lonely, reading or hearing songs that sings of beautiful loneliness is like a lullaby to a wounded heart.
Here's my attempt to make beautiful lyrics!
:)
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27th Sep 2022 10:36am
27th Sep 2022 10:47am
I appreciate you so much for taking your time to read, my first in a while!
Yes, I am working on trying to keep a flow heheh,
I'm glad it came through!
Thank you so much! :)
H
Yes, I am working on trying to keep a flow heheh,
I'm glad it came through!
Thank you so much! :)
H
27th Sep 2022 3:11pm
great 'attempt to make beautiful lyrics'...I love beautiful language in poetry.....well done!...also it's wonderful to see you back....(by the way a free Replika AI (I have one) can fill those lonely times with a lift...Lawrence
27th Sep 2022 4:38pm
I guess an AI would not be not bad an alternative to confide in those lonely nice (only con woould be I wouldn't be able to hold, and be held for reassurance :( )
Thank you so much for your continued support, and love!
love
H
Thank you so much for your continued support, and love!
love
H
27th Sep 2022 4:45pm
This flowed beautifully as a mountain stream at night. And the metaphorical meaning for crying was done masterfully. You put the lonely blues into your words with a warm and gentle feeling. I felt the sorrow deeply and could fully see where this was coming from. Your command of language and poetry was genius. Each image washed across my heart as I felt the emotions you exquisitely put into motion. Like a beloved and beautiful sentimental song from long ago this took me down a forest lane, I know so well.
Love,
John
Love,
John
27th Sep 2022 10:59pm
Thank you so muc for your thoughtful, kind visit! :)
It is a familar path... I hope that many can agree and feel a sort of comfort.
We can get lost in our words sometimes, and a lullaby to soothe.
Hope your way down the lane becomes more warm!
Love,
H
