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Holding my breath
holding my breath
and just
for a second
I forget
who I am
lost inside myself
like I never
existed
the moment
slowly rushes
through my body
and just like that
in the blink
of an eye
I'm gone
and just
for a second
I forget
who I am
lost inside myself
like I never
existed
the moment
slowly rushes
through my body
and just like that
in the blink
of an eye
I'm gone
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Re. Holding my breath
6th Sep 2022 6:33pm
Dear JC,
Perfectly recognized feelings of anxiety and distress in this poem. How often I find myself teetering on the notion if I exhale I’m a goner. I often wonder if these feelings will abate some day…it was a feeling of unity to read this delicate poem of raw expression. Beautifully written. H🌷
Perfectly recognized feelings of anxiety and distress in this poem. How often I find myself teetering on the notion if I exhale I’m a goner. I often wonder if these feelings will abate some day…it was a feeling of unity to read this delicate poem of raw expression. Beautifully written. H🌷
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Re: Re. Holding my breath
6th Sep 2022 6:40pm
H,
Thank you so very much. I appreciate you leaving your sweet words and thoughts here with me.
Much love
JC
Thank you so very much. I appreciate you leaving your sweet words and thoughts here with me.
Much love
JC
Re. Holding my breath
6th Sep 2022 7:06pm
and who of us hasn't felt what your piece expressed so well? I like the format, as well...it accentuates the emotions felt. Liked this!
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Re: Re. Holding my breath
6th Sep 2022 7:47pm
Too many have, I'm sure. Thank you for your kind words, it means a lot to me.
xo
JC
xo
JC
Re. Holding my breath
7th Sep 2022 2:26am
Nope. You're staying.
You're not done "chasing your journey" here. And I'm also a selfish reader.
I feel this poem of yours, though. Perhaps we all have, just haven't expressed it as well as you did.
You're not done "chasing your journey" here. And I'm also a selfish reader.
I feel this poem of yours, though. Perhaps we all have, just haven't expressed it as well as you did.
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Re: Re. Holding my breath
8th Sep 2022 00:42am
Thank you, I think we've all felt this a time or two. Seems my turn, again. I appreciate you as a person dear poet. Your kindness doesn't go unnoticed.
Always,
JC
Always,
JC
Re. Holding my breath
7th Sep 2022 12:58pm
Re: Re. Holding my breath
8th Sep 2022 00:44am
I love your comment, thank you. I'm staying... for now :-)
I hope you're well, happy and healthy.
xo
JC
I hope you're well, happy and healthy.
xo
JC
Re. Holding my breath
JC, Re-re-reading your honest and well phrased write.
Feel better soon(est) and write about that! :-)
-Ted
Feel better soon(est) and write about that! :-)
-Ted
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Re: Re. Holding my breath
8th Sep 2022 00:49am