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8th Aug 2022 7:29pm
8th Aug 2022 7:47pm
Anonymous
9th Aug 2022 2:03am
I like this one quite a bit--
There's a pretty coherent narrative about an "Uncle" (the name Buck--John Candy was an "Uncle Buck," but also in Tarantino's KB 1), who molests someone and ends up killed.
The implied splitting of personality;
The chase and escape;
The visual of the harpoon / ice pick / awl weapon;
All these work rather well for this reader;
Some details, the significance of the Smucker's Jar or what exactly happens, particularly who dispatches the Uncle & how; the beginning of the narrative, the relationship between the hunk, Becky, and the Uncle, and then the killer (not a satisfactory sense that I understand these for this reader).
These details elude me on 2 readings. I believe they're there, in the constellation of sounds, details, and associations, but I can't access them. Which is too bad. If the language came down from the Joycean Finnegan's Wake / Shel Silverstein, the narrative and the significance of the details--for this reader, at least--would benefit.
LIKED!
If this were mine, I'd look at the lyrics of the Jesus Lizard's 1st 4 albums--they had a taste for the seedy, criminal, and perverse. Would less be more, in this case? I don't know. Maybe.
There's a pretty coherent narrative about an "Uncle" (the name Buck--John Candy was an "Uncle Buck," but also in Tarantino's KB 1), who molests someone and ends up killed.
The implied splitting of personality;
The chase and escape;
The visual of the harpoon / ice pick / awl weapon;
All these work rather well for this reader;
Some details, the significance of the Smucker's Jar or what exactly happens, particularly who dispatches the Uncle & how; the beginning of the narrative, the relationship between the hunk, Becky, and the Uncle, and then the killer (not a satisfactory sense that I understand these for this reader).
These details elude me on 2 readings. I believe they're there, in the constellation of sounds, details, and associations, but I can't access them. Which is too bad. If the language came down from the Joycean Finnegan's Wake / Shel Silverstein, the narrative and the significance of the details--for this reader, at least--would benefit.
LIKED!
If this were mine, I'd look at the lyrics of the Jesus Lizard's 1st 4 albums--they had a taste for the seedy, criminal, and perverse. Would less be more, in this case? I don't know. Maybe.
9th Aug 2022 4:32am
I love your incite. You usually get the bulk of the work, and stand it up enough to shoot it down for its lack of dodgeability. I have a solid critic in you, and by that I've grown supra-cognitively.
Thanks.
Thanks.
