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Drop the hammer
Just fucking
do it.
I’m on a bed
of nails,
and I’m sure
you haven’t
pushed down
because you
don’t want to
have to
hear the blood
fill up my lungs.
But I do.
So I brought a
sledgehammer
in case of
emergency
squeamishness.
It should just
take one
good hit
to see the
light fade
from my eyes.
It should just
take one hit
to hear my
throat choke
out its last
gratitude.
Just one
good hit.
Wrap your
hands around
the handle,
raise it over
your head.
Let it drop.
Look away.
do it.
I’m on a bed
of nails,
and I’m sure
you haven’t
pushed down
because you
don’t want to
have to
hear the blood
fill up my lungs.
But I do.
So I brought a
sledgehammer
in case of
emergency
squeamishness.
It should just
take one
good hit
to see the
light fade
from my eyes.
It should just
take one hit
to hear my
throat choke
out its last
gratitude.
Just one
good hit.
Wrap your
hands around
the handle,
raise it over
your head.
Let it drop.
Look away.
Published 11th Jul 2022
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11th Jul 2022 3:56pm
good morning lovely Betty I don't see you being the type of letting anyone dropping a hammer on you in this fashion I see you taking it from them and giving as good as you got if not better...still there is love which makes us vulnerable...sometimes my heart loves too hard and someone will only get my soft side when it was my darker side that attracted them first...the best we can do is be ourselves love sometimes hurts... I think it's worth it...you can't be anyone else so do you proud...
a very powerful write...
a very powerful write...
11th Jul 2022 5:37pm
11th Jul 2022 5:58pm
This reminds me a bit of Sylvia Plath's writing in her later, self-destructive mode. What one critic called a "tantrum of style". It's a style (and a tantrum, as in an outburst of anger) that I enjoy, personally, and you affect it pretty well here. It's a poem that reeks of death and suffering and rage.
11th Jul 2022 9:53pm
That is one of the best compliments I’ve ever had. Plath is an absolute goddess, and if my rage style reminds you of her I’m absolutely blown away. Thank you. I mean it.
11th Jul 2022 11:01pm
I’m a big fan of Plath myself. She sticks with me, and I’ve written several poems about her, including recently. As Philip Larkin said, some of her work is like nothing else in literature.
