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Societal Beauty

Be pretty, be perfect, be thin,
Give them a smile and you'll surely win.
Heighten what's short, cover up those eyes,
And they'll never guess it�s just a disguise.

Spend every hour that you possess,
Before the screen that prescribes your dress,
It's our new mirror, society's voice,
The one that denies beauty's a choice.

Study your role, rehearse all your lines,
And raise up the fake upon your shrines,
Beauty over wisdom, to fit their style,
And let vanity grow, bloom, and defile

Written by Lee

Published 21st Mar 2012 | Edited 12th Jun 2012

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mjs211 (MikeTheEngineer)

21st Mar 2012 4:54am

I feel like this piece is really good, with some nice rhythm. I think there are some commas that could be removed to improve the flow--they should be used at the end of thoughts, not necessarily at the end of every line. One example:

Spend every hour that you possess
In front of that box that tells you how to dress,

Quick spelling: surely, it's. Overall though I liked it, its singsong sound adding a hint of satirical feel.