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In the Garden
In the Garden
Hope it rains
today....
the ground
is dry
to dustiness.
The unbearable heat scorches the dirt
to the roots....
even the silty organics infused
by years
of leaves
and clippings
are no match....
watering
can only
do so much.
Hope it rains
today....
the ground
is dry
to dustiness.
The unbearable heat scorches the dirt
to the roots....
even the silty organics infused
by years
of leaves
and clippings
are no match....
watering
can only
do so much.
Published 27th Jun 2022
Author's Note
Desire comes in several levels. Once it becomes overwhelming, the exquisite pain of it all becomes its own driving force. The thirst. The hunger. The suffocation of it all.
When only one of them feels that, the intensity is so surrealistic, so unimaginable, it's like being in a burning atmosphere where there is no let up, no end in sight, no sense of endless leaning over the torrent into an abyss of shamelessness. There is nothing lonelier than unrequited love fed mocking embers of ingratitude. This is how trees burn to their roots, dried and preserved as rocks to leave the rings of their struggle in the unrelenting wind.
When only one of them feels that, the intensity is so surrealistic, so unimaginable, it's like being in a burning atmosphere where there is no let up, no end in sight, no sense of endless leaning over the torrent into an abyss of shamelessness. There is nothing lonelier than unrequited love fed mocking embers of ingratitude. This is how trees burn to their roots, dried and preserved as rocks to leave the rings of their struggle in the unrelenting wind.
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27th Jun 2022 1:03pm
RT,
The metaphoric use within your poem was already so potent and wrought with emotion yet you've driven it to an even higher level with your beautifully eloquent Author's note, making me feel so incredibly affected. I'm deeply struck by the enormity in which I can identify. The solidarity of the unrelenting suffocating sense of desire.... mentally begging for relief... the painful ache of unrequited emotions and how they can literally fuck you all up....in several excruciating ways. I am saddened that we both share in that experience, in that awful pain but I take solace in the grit, strength and fortitude that I gained from those wicked hurtful experiences, too...
This piece makes me feel connected and not so alone in that/those experiences.
I'm still breathless in the way that you described... really exquisite.
Thank you for sharing your truth and knowledge with us.
🌹 - B
The metaphoric use within your poem was already so potent and wrought with emotion yet you've driven it to an even higher level with your beautifully eloquent Author's note, making me feel so incredibly affected. I'm deeply struck by the enormity in which I can identify. The solidarity of the unrelenting suffocating sense of desire.... mentally begging for relief... the painful ache of unrequited emotions and how they can literally fuck you all up....in several excruciating ways. I am saddened that we both share in that experience, in that awful pain but I take solace in the grit, strength and fortitude that I gained from those wicked hurtful experiences, too...
This piece makes me feel connected and not so alone in that/those experiences.
I'm still breathless in the way that you described... really exquisite.
Thank you for sharing your truth and knowledge with us.
🌹 - B
27th Jun 2022 3:01pm
Thank you....I really hear that. I would rather have just read about it, right?
But, there is no other way to capture the raw emotion of the experience. In some ways I feel more ready now to really give myself. In other ways, I feel jaded and resistant.
I think that just being open allows me to continue to connect freshly and allow others to simply be who they are without my projecting my previous pains and reservations.
No matter what happens, or not, my being healthy, understanding, and non-judgemental about others and myself is the most effective pathway.
Let go. And then let go.
Thanks for sharing so deeply.
But, there is no other way to capture the raw emotion of the experience. In some ways I feel more ready now to really give myself. In other ways, I feel jaded and resistant.
I think that just being open allows me to continue to connect freshly and allow others to simply be who they are without my projecting my previous pains and reservations.
No matter what happens, or not, my being healthy, understanding, and non-judgemental about others and myself is the most effective pathway.
Let go. And then let go.
Thanks for sharing so deeply.
27th Jun 2022 1:04pm
28th Jun 2022 9:25am
27th Jun 2022 10:52pm
I enjoyed your poem, the metaphor. Your note was even more beautifully poetic and touching.
28th Jun 2022 9:26am
