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Modigliani Love
without her lover
she had no desire
destroyed by his death
wondering why bother
dead before his time
she was left alone
nine stories up
tears in her eyes
a baby in her belly
and sweet memories
turned to knives
cutting her tie to life
heavy rain, loud wind
intentions of suicide
grief without end
a unborn about to die
with his touch in mind
she stepped to the edge
felt a kick one last time
then took her last step
a love so strong
three souls died
a beautiful song
wrong or right
she had no desire
destroyed by his death
wondering why bother
dead before his time
she was left alone
nine stories up
tears in her eyes
a baby in her belly
and sweet memories
turned to knives
cutting her tie to life
heavy rain, loud wind
intentions of suicide
grief without end
a unborn about to die
with his touch in mind
she stepped to the edge
felt a kick one last time
then took her last step
a love so strong
three souls died
a beautiful song
wrong or right
Published 26th May 2022
| Edited 27th May 2022
Author's Note
Look up Modigliani if you don’t know who he is. This is a true story about a painter and the love of his life.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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27th May 2022 1:18am
Dang Rainy - this is so sad.
It also reminds me of when older couples die.
I do believe you can die from heartache. It just has a way
of making the heart work overtime with anxiety - not knowing when or if
you will ever see your partner again.
I also loved stanza three.
The metaphor with the knives and memories.
Awesome!!
You kept the flow spot on.
The ending was tragic as is most real life.
Great job:)
It also reminds me of when older couples die.
I do believe you can die from heartache. It just has a way
of making the heart work overtime with anxiety - not knowing when or if
you will ever see your partner again.
I also loved stanza three.
The metaphor with the knives and memories.
Awesome!!
You kept the flow spot on.
The ending was tragic as is most real life.
Great job:)
2nd Jun 2022 00:51am
Thank you for the read and compliments. That stanza was my favorite too! You are the best!
27th May 2022 2:28am
It's great to see a post from you William. :) You always capture a subject with such a depth of emotion that it's easy to experience the feelings written into the piece. This is definitely tragic imbued with a deep sense of extreme sadness, depression, and loss. Really powerful stuff. I will definitely look up the story.
2nd Jun 2022 00:52am
What an in depth and flattering comment. Thank you so much. I feel like you get exactly what I’m going for!
2nd Jun 2022 1:34am
2nd Jun 2022 1:36am
Well thank you and thank you for the reading. That is a nice complement and I really appreciate the reading list add. I’m happy that the few readers I’ve had so far are really getting what I was going for.
Anonymous
30th Nov 2022 4:50am
very sad n depressing...
19th Feb 2023 9:38am
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