Ashes

Let me know if it's in the right catergory.

very well written man keep up the good work. :)

... you have chosen sets the tone - but I actually preferred reading this very slowly with a distinct air of grim resignation rather than it being an animated angst rant. That's not the key thing though, Judas - this is a well crafted piece with a powerful message. Fatalism by its own nature tends toward the submissive and as you point out -'passion has long since burned low.' So whilst I understand your category dilemma it becomes almost trivial when compared to the quality of your well wrought words.

Thanks Abra! I wrote it as a slow piece, first poem I've had in a while which carried any weight.

Thanks for reading, glad you thought it was a quality piece, means alot coming from you.

this fits better in the dark category, but its a stunning piece of verse all the same, I love the stanza "My words---substance". Very good Judas!

Thanks Priya.

Whole poem was pretty much built around that stanza.
A friend asked for some advice, I told her that my advice was "ashes in her mouth" rest of it just flowed after that.

are arbitrary.

The thematic concern with ash and fire is really interesting. So often society demands passion from us, and refuses the notion that sometimes the individual has no passion left to give.

im exreemly impressed this is an amazing job! is so carefully thought of that it makes you wonder if it's actually true..
it is