Ember

very!

Yeah that's what I'm afraid of. Thanks, though. Found it in a notebook and put it up on a whim. I'm not sure but that I might still pull it. It just isn't teaching or learning anything. Maybe a rewrite can give it some substance. I'll work on it.

yes... rewrite. try that.

it seems now. :)

great
fleeting
moment/thought.......

yr gittin 'good' at tha'stuff, yung'feller

Thanks man. I'm working on going back to more meaningful stuff to me.I'm going to try to do some more meaningful stuff again. That damned long poem is just eating all of my time so I put out a few softies real fast. They're alright, but I haven't written a decent poem since "Wrap" > I'm going to write  little slower, but go back to better. I'll still comment on yours, but I've got some brainpoems to work through.

our more unpleasant craziness grows outta all these hair-splittin discernments wee make about sweetprecious Self (& 'those others')......

lighten up, kid...lest ye wind a pant-pissin, sot-brain drunk or fckn dope fiend.....but, of course, 'those' are such romantic sufferings to indulge-------

Your Stuff is Great(er than 99.9% of the self-absorbed drivel on this site, & better than 97.4% of everything written anywhere) - if ye wanna fuck it up, just keep on Tryin(as in Contrivin') HardHardHard to make It greater.//....quit beatin yr old horses. they ain't gonna stand or fall any better or worse for your obcessing...write fresh, leave it be, & rite mo'fresh......

okay....nevermind.....4get eye said anything...eye only Know NoThing ---- 'ave a NiceDay!!!

....a good read
Kitty

Thank you Kitty. Tis what tis, a brief little ember that rose from my fire so I set it down.

everything said without saying much at all . Perfect