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Red
She says we all have our
vices. I sit bedside with my
head in my hands. Her
clothes are bright and
balled up on the carpet.
She says it's not the
end of the world. Her
hands work the tension in my
neck. Sometimes, I swear her
fingers wrap all the way
around.
She says you're not the
only one. We lie in the
dark, her hand sinking down. She
whispers to me; her tongue is a
serpent.
vices. I sit bedside with my
head in my hands. Her
clothes are bright and
balled up on the carpet.
She says it's not the
end of the world. Her
hands work the tension in my
neck. Sometimes, I swear her
fingers wrap all the way
around.
She says you're not the
only one. We lie in the
dark, her hand sinking down. She
whispers to me; her tongue is a
serpent.
Published 28th Feb 2022
Author's Note
~*Above photo is "Alegorie Auf Die Lebenslust" by Hans Makart*~
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28th Feb 2022 11:44pm
Two poems in and I’m already a fan.
The use of colour I find in this fascinating — if it refers to love / passion, or danger. But in the artwork, it flows, and connects the whole piece as if fluid.
That ending line is such an incredible way to end a poem. It lingers long after the poem has finished.
That metaphor of the snake is so vivid in thought, and word, and deed.
Yeah… only good things to say about this. Thank you for sharing.
-M
The use of colour I find in this fascinating — if it refers to love / passion, or danger. But in the artwork, it flows, and connects the whole piece as if fluid.
That ending line is such an incredible way to end a poem. It lingers long after the poem has finished.
That metaphor of the snake is so vivid in thought, and word, and deed.
Yeah… only good things to say about this. Thank you for sharing.
-M
1st Mar 2022 00:18am
You're too kind, Missy, thank you again (: I figured since I wrote "Blue" about something calm and placid, I should write "Red" about something with a darker, erotic tone to it. I'm glad you picked up on those nuances in there. Cheers!
28th Feb 2022 11:48pm
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