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Escape
Tempting escape
Broken fate
Savoring hate
Hurting deeply
Too much on my plate
Can’t eat
Can’t sleep
All that’s left is defeat
Sitting empty
Begging limply
Wishing simply
To escape.
Broken fate
Savoring hate
Hurting deeply
Too much on my plate
Can’t eat
Can’t sleep
All that’s left is defeat
Sitting empty
Begging limply
Wishing simply
To escape.
Published 23rd Nov 2021
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24th Nov 2021 1:11am
With deep pain is where the possibility for great potential can prosper. I hope that very much for you.
I am listening.
I am listening.
24th Nov 2021 6:10am
Dear B,
Within the context of this poem is a very consistent meter. Reading this your phrasing rolls off the tongue. Subject wise it’s difficult to comment on because escaping from hurt and pain feels impossible most days and you capture that trapped feeling very succinctly. Great write. H🌷
Within the context of this poem is a very consistent meter. Reading this your phrasing rolls off the tongue. Subject wise it’s difficult to comment on because escaping from hurt and pain feels impossible most days and you capture that trapped feeling very succinctly. Great write. H🌷
25th Nov 2021 00:29am
Don't want to be sugary, but you can escape in a novel, you can esacpe in your dreams. No easy solution.
