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Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
It is already morning and as I sit here today, I did yesterday to
Pen clenched in a hard grip, smithing words from my fist
I used to be a midnight poet, writing line after line, while others slept
It was an innocent escape, I was a productive hedonist
Somewhere along those lines, too many were crossed, self-promises unkept
Midnights lines turned to morning rhymes,
While I escaped the flashing warning signs,
After all, it was always my escape,
Isn't that quite poetic?
Yes, it’s all quite poetic,
Until there are no more rhymes,
And all that's left are only lines
Pen clenched in a hard grip, smithing words from my fist
I used to be a midnight poet, writing line after line, while others slept
It was an innocent escape, I was a productive hedonist
Somewhere along those lines, too many were crossed, self-promises unkept
Midnights lines turned to morning rhymes,
While I escaped the flashing warning signs,
After all, it was always my escape,
Isn't that quite poetic?
Yes, it’s all quite poetic,
Until there are no more rhymes,
And all that's left are only lines
Author's Note
Do you see my vice? I never realised addiction was a major poetic genre until I went online. Makes me wonder if anyone can relate to the above, irrespective of your vice?
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Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
Nice descriptive work here, PseudoEgo. Sitting alone at night with pen & paper is easily imagined.
I would say, there is nothing wrong with 'only lines'. It's better than those other lines, lol. What defines a poet? This piece gets more interesting each time it's read.
I would say, there is nothing wrong with 'only lines'. It's better than those other lines, lol. What defines a poet? This piece gets more interesting each time it's read.
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Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
10th Oct 2021 12:43pm
Thank you Billy - really appreciate your feedback!
I really loved your interpretation. One could also interpret the "only lines" as "those other lines". Trading "lines for "lines and rhymes" until there is only lines. Wanted to try hide that perspective with only a few discrete clues, hopefully open for ones own interpretation
I really loved your interpretation. One could also interpret the "only lines" as "those other lines". Trading "lines for "lines and rhymes" until there is only lines. Wanted to try hide that perspective with only a few discrete clues, hopefully open for ones own interpretation
Re: Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
10th Oct 2021 1:04pm
I was gonna add 'never rhyme for rhyme's sake' as lines are fine.
It's a fine line finding the right rhyme too. 😉
It's a fine line finding the right rhyme too. 😉
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Re: Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
10th Oct 2021 1:12pm
Ah - haha! Brilliant. I'm happy with that too.
You clearly have a knack for this. What would you change to make the "real lines blurred" for the average reader assuming it wasn't posted in this forum category.
I'm thinking keep title to just "Midnight poet" and remove "hedonist" somehow. What do you reckon?
You clearly have a knack for this. What would you change to make the "real lines blurred" for the average reader assuming it wasn't posted in this forum category.
I'm thinking keep title to just "Midnight poet" and remove "hedonist" somehow. What do you reckon?
Re: Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
10th Oct 2021 1:12pm
Ah - haha! Brilliant. I'm happy with that too.
You clearly have a knack for this. What would you change to make the "real lines blurred" for the average reader assuming it wasn't posted in this forum category.
I'm thinking keep title to just "Midnight poet" and remove "hedonist" somehow. What do you reckon?
You clearly have a knack for this. What would you change to make the "real lines blurred" for the average reader assuming it wasn't posted in this forum category.
I'm thinking keep title to just "Midnight poet" and remove "hedonist" somehow. What do you reckon?
Re: Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
10th Oct 2021 1:12pm
Ah - haha! Brilliant. I'm happy with that too.
You clearly have a knack for this. What would you change to make the "real lines blurred" for the average reader assuming it wasn't posted in this forum category.
I'm thinking keep title to just "Midnight poet" and remove "hedonist" somehow. What do you reckon?
You clearly have a knack for this. What would you change to make the "real lines blurred" for the average reader assuming it wasn't posted in this forum category.
I'm thinking keep title to just "Midnight poet" and remove "hedonist" somehow. What do you reckon?
Re: Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
10th Oct 2021 7:16pm
I would just take my glasses off to make the lines blurred, lol. I'm not sure, can't think right now as my auntie is here & I need to show her around. 😊
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10th Oct 2021 1:55pm
Re. Midnight poet - trading lines for lines and rhymes
11th Oct 2021 6:25am
Helluva piece of writing here! Echoing the other commenter, gets more interested with each read👏 I dig this very much and absolutely love this section,
“ Somewhere along those lines, too many were crossed, self-promises unkept
Midnights lines turned to morning rhymes,
While I escaped the flashing warning signs,
After all, it was always my escape,
Isn't that quite poetic? “
The whole piece resonates deeply but this part hits hard. Really great stuff here👏👏
“ Somewhere along those lines, too many were crossed, self-promises unkept
Midnights lines turned to morning rhymes,
While I escaped the flashing warning signs,
After all, it was always my escape,
Isn't that quite poetic? “
The whole piece resonates deeply but this part hits hard. Really great stuff here👏👏
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12th Oct 2021 8:05am
Thank you ! You're comments means a lot and there is a certain comfort in knowing others can relate.
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11th Oct 2021 6:26am
And I love ur profile pic! Nothing better than mid 70s face painted Dylan
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