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Yellow Flowers
March 26th
I will bring you yellow flowers
to say thank you
thank you
to you,
to flowers and to all the many yellows.
I am so unutterably blessed
so many blessings
that I cannot count
tears are pouring out of me
tears of gratitude
the place is so wonderous
the light that shines from there
so very lovely
thank you
I will bring you yellow flowers
to say thank you
thank you
to you,
to flowers and to all the many yellows.
I am so unutterably blessed
so many blessings
that I cannot count
tears are pouring out of me
tears of gratitude
the place is so wonderous
the light that shines from there
so very lovely
thank you
Published 1st Mar 2012
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simple and pure, the word repetition. I was trying to figure out why it flowed so well, then I started seeing the beginnings of a very interesting meter, although it does not seem intentional. If you tweaked it a bit better to suite the natural meter it could be even better
1st Mar 2012 6:30pm
..... I get stuck on meter - if I work it everything just goes flat... thanks for the comment. Maybe I should dost this to you as a message ?
can you show me ?
can you show me ?
Anonymous
23rd Mar 2012 8:33pm
Flowers are always nice to give. LOL :)
15th May 2012 12:58pm
Dearest Phoebe ... The Great Masters say that "gratitude" is one of the ways of finding the Lord - and you express it so beautifully in this wonderful poem. I once wrote "I would like to give you a bouquet of Roses ... and then an inner voice spoke in my heart and said ... instead of the roses give me the love of your non-existence so we can meet as one in your heart of hearts. A wonderful write ... Love and Peace ... Bruce
15th May 2012 7:29pm
