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Waiting for an espresso at The Entrepôt
Published 17th Aug 2021
Author's Note
“A poem should have the touch ... the way sunlight falls on Braille.” .......silent lotus
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Mark_Parsons (Mark Parsons)Today 3:15am
I like how it reads like a symbolist poem, the conflating of the entrepot with the psychological river of discontent.
Interesting use of white space & font.
Enjoy the way the speaker's psychological itinerary intersects with the "her's" satoris.
Reminds me a big of some of the poems from Rimbaud's book of prose, Illuminations.
The line "oddly odd to me too" feels like it's trying to hard, and the real significance of the line--not the overt cleverness--that this experience is seeming to someone heretofore unmentioned, gets obscured.
Enjoyed!
Mark_Parsons (Mark Parsons)Today 3:15am
I like how it reads like a symbolist poem, the conflating of the entrepot with the psychological river of discontent.
Interesting use of white space & font.
Enjoy the way the speaker's psychological itinerary intersects with the "her's" satoris.
Reminds me a big of some of the poems from Rimbaud's book of prose, Illuminations.
The line "oddly odd to me too" feels like it's trying to hard, and the real significance of the line--not the overt cleverness--that this experience is seeming to someone heretofore unmentioned, gets obscured.
Enjoyed!
30th Aug 2021 1:49pm
