Loyalty

Tattoo this one on my fins. 👌🏻

-M

I enjoy this--there's a sense of a real, authentic, immediate situation.
I don't necessarily understand it, but the concrete details are enough to keep me from getting lost.
What a strangely effective listing to describe arriving back:

"concrete and coffee,
doorbell and dripping"

Then the disembodied voice.
We don't know where the metaphor begins and ends, and that's part of the pleasure here.
The last 2 lines are a bit weak, don't do much for this reader.
There's definite potential here.
Enjoyed!

Thank you Mark, this really helps.

Since humans are stuck with humaning, its just a thought, that gardner's aren't stuck with landscapes. its past due, but I have some overgrown azaleas to cut back or replace with boxwood. Life is change. That applies to people too. Its your garden.

It's strange. I hate instability, I'd hate that for my child. Swimming brings chaos without the chaos brought on by feeling too much.

It doesn't matter if one feels much or little, its the depth of any one feeling. In America we have a saying, "trust your gut". In other words, trust your instincts. Humans tend to rationalize reasons to overlook what their instincts tell them. I know I'm guilty of that. And I know that soon or late we pay the piper whether we rock the boat or not.

Dear IS,

Your closing lines are absolutely fabulous! It makes me think sometimes it’s the expelling of negative energy needed to let the answers or positive energy come through to make the better choices. More likely I have no idea what I’m talking about but sure did appreciate your poem. H🌷