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this is who i am
I made it through
to meet a sunset
leaves falling off
from tall
thin trees
crispy autumn fall
from top
to the ground
I saw it all
you know:
a start
the end
missed middle
and no one cares
that moon is black
without reflection
of a sun
leaves falling off
I carry on
what is there
to be lost?
this all
is
deep
bleeding
cut
of
a
throat
you know:
every second counts
time is money
money honey
I made it through
here it comes
dark
dead
my
precious
sunset
to meet a sunset
leaves falling off
from tall
thin trees
crispy autumn fall
from top
to the ground
I saw it all
you know:
a start
the end
missed middle
and no one cares
that moon is black
without reflection
of a sun
leaves falling off
I carry on
what is there
to be lost?
this all
is
deep
bleeding
cut
of
a
throat
you know:
every second counts
time is money
money honey
I made it through
here it comes
dark
dead
my
precious
sunset
Published 23rd Jan 2010
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24th Jan 2010 4:43am
"that moon is black
without reflection
of a sun" ~ It sticks with me. I look forward to see how your style evolves.
without reflection
of a sun" ~ It sticks with me. I look forward to see how your style evolves.
24th Jan 2010 11:31am
thank you, Kandice, for your support and understanding. there will definetely be more of freshly written poems for your evaluation. as soon as you start creatively write and work towards improvement - you can never stop :) well, at least, it's true for me
7th Feb 2010 6:13pm
Even though at first read I thought this was quite a bleak response to the title, the images of nature are what stay with me. You don't mention cycles, but the connotation of falling leaves/sunsets still evokes the feeling of natural cycles. It's as though there's an unmentioned connection to growth and renewal here.
8th Feb 2010 12:08pm
thank you, Jess for your kind comments and support. usually i struggle with the title - but trying to get over it. that's why, sometimes title doesn't really match the contents of the poem.
