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Me! Me! Me!Ow!
Celebrate the dedicated celibate and throw thine hands up!
A new queen enters,
as the target on her back centers!
More real and fleshy than nibbling at centaurs for jollies,
in living color AND unafraid, a warrior; mind, body, and soul.
Stronger than any of the usual follies,
watching them line up like fillies
in big salt flake city.
No tongue to waggle,
you may beg it back or haggle,
though there is no better payment I receive, than the silence of those who misperceive.
A new queen enters,
as the target on her back centers!
More real and fleshy than nibbling at centaurs for jollies,
in living color AND unafraid, a warrior; mind, body, and soul.
Stronger than any of the usual follies,
watching them line up like fillies
in big salt flake city.
No tongue to waggle,
you may beg it back or haggle,
though there is no better payment I receive, than the silence of those who misperceive.
Published 11th Jul 2021
Author's Note
So I "didn't do shit" hahaha but you've blocked me again, so it seems I DID do some shit.
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Anonymous
11th Jul 2021 5:09am
There's a lot I enjoy here--
the setting, the rhythms of the lines (some dactyls, which give it energy).
I especially like something like:
"Stronger than any of the usual follies,
watching them line up like fillies"
The way the 1st line establishes two dactyls with feminine endings, separated by a pyrrhic (DUH-duh-duh duh-duh DUH-duh-duh) then switches to straight dactyls in the next line. Nice effect for me.
I love the idea of watching this woman enter (don't know where, exactly) & she's got a target on her back--whose target? Would-be satyrs or bulls? Or moralizers? I hope it's the former.
I love that line that comes after the aforementioned couplet of dactyls:
in big salt flake city--
I'm not sure how I'm supposed to read it, but my mind...well, my mind goes to an x-rated version of the poem, where a certain substance that contains a lot of salt, has a tendency to dry and flake, once it's on skin (but this is a pg comment) so...
the setting, the rhythms of the lines (some dactyls, which give it energy).
I especially like something like:
"Stronger than any of the usual follies,
watching them line up like fillies"
The way the 1st line establishes two dactyls with feminine endings, separated by a pyrrhic (DUH-duh-duh duh-duh DUH-duh-duh) then switches to straight dactyls in the next line. Nice effect for me.
I love the idea of watching this woman enter (don't know where, exactly) & she's got a target on her back--whose target? Would-be satyrs or bulls? Or moralizers? I hope it's the former.
I love that line that comes after the aforementioned couplet of dactyls:
in big salt flake city--
I'm not sure how I'm supposed to read it, but my mind...well, my mind goes to an x-rated version of the poem, where a certain substance that contains a lot of salt, has a tendency to dry and flake, once it's on skin (but this is a pg comment) so...
11th Jul 2021 5:48am
Thank you for your comment! This post was directed towards an online argument I was involved in. I declared myself the new queen after the other person gave up and blocked me. The entrance is to the WORLD!
The target is because the other person threatened me and said to watch my back.
I'll leave the rest up to individual creative interpretation, I'm glad you could enjoy it!😆✨
The target is because the other person threatened me and said to watch my back.
I'll leave the rest up to individual creative interpretation, I'm glad you could enjoy it!😆✨
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