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Tin can in space.
I was once described as a tin can in space.
Carrying on, unchanging in course or speed
Until something exerted a stronger force upon me.
Many years have I pondered this case
Wondering the true meaning, and indeed
The ramifications, if truth, it be.
In reality, he's right, my friend. I face
So much fear in life I feel the need
To float, empty, will-less, without destiny.
Carrying on, unchanging in course or speed
Until something exerted a stronger force upon me.
Many years have I pondered this case
Wondering the true meaning, and indeed
The ramifications, if truth, it be.
In reality, he's right, my friend. I face
So much fear in life I feel the need
To float, empty, will-less, without destiny.
Published 23rd Feb 2012
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28th Feb 2012 1:34am
Yes this Wu Wei is an important principle acting without action. A purely Newtonian inertia. But I'm not sure in the poem itself if it is a good thing or a bad. You mention fear but the problem seems to be stated more as a curiosity than a reason for alarm. I feel I want it to be more of either one or the other, although in 9 lines that might be asking a bit much.
28th Feb 2012 2:16pm
The fear is the reason for the lack of controlled direction. Fear of failure; of rejection and many others. Ordinarily I drift until something makes me change the course of my life.
Essentially this poem was an acknowledgment to a close friend who pointed out this character flaw many years ago and I wanted him to know that I did heed the words.
Essentially this poem was an acknowledgment to a close friend who pointed out this character flaw many years ago and I wanted him to know that I did heed the words.
