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The Meadowsweet
The meadow sweet grows near the lane,
cow parsley forms a bridal train.
Each flower's scent attracts a bee,
a simple walk is heavenly -
the summer time is here again.
In this mid season nothing's plain
it brings pleasures I can't explain;
the beauty of a plant, eg
the meadow sweet.
The image lingers in the brain,
the scent in the nasal membrane.
So, keep it in your memory,
the season can't forever be
and, as this beauty starts to wane
... the meadow sweet.
cow parsley forms a bridal train.
Each flower's scent attracts a bee,
a simple walk is heavenly -
the summer time is here again.
In this mid season nothing's plain
it brings pleasures I can't explain;
the beauty of a plant, eg
the meadow sweet.
The image lingers in the brain,
the scent in the nasal membrane.
So, keep it in your memory,
the season can't forever be
and, as this beauty starts to wane
... the meadow sweet.
Published 10th Jun 2021
Author's Note
This is a rondeau http://www.thepoetsgarret.com/repeat/rondeau.html but DUP doesn't seem to have that as part of its themes.
As usual I'm not happy with it. The refrain isn't sufficiently immersed within the poem and hence it comes across as a bit cobbled together. There are positive things to say about it but ...
Oh, I also got the idea for the poem from Lucy Vickery's Spectator Magazine poetry section ...
As usual I'm not happy with it. The refrain isn't sufficiently immersed within the poem and hence it comes across as a bit cobbled together. There are positive things to say about it but ...
Oh, I also got the idea for the poem from Lucy Vickery's Spectator Magazine poetry section ...
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12th Jun 2021 12:39pm
It's so rare to read a poem that feels like a poem on this site, with a style and theme and coherent, thoughtful approach to the material that respects form, language, detail, and perspective. This was a joy to read for that reason, and I liked the portmanteau of "meadow" and "sweet."
12th Jun 2021 1:49pm
thank you for your kind comments. I really appreciate the feedback (which makes me feel embarrassed that I haven't given enough feedback to other poets such as yourself).
