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The crossroads of my heart
I stand here now, and I need to choose
This decision I feel there is no way to win or too loose
To fall in love was never my plan but rules they say you can only love one
One's much older but I know he care's
One younger, too, with his full life to share
But what if I choose and do it all wrong
Eyes filling with tears as I hear our old love song
As we lay on the grass under the bright moonlight
Watching bats over head flying through the night sky
Maybe I shouldn't turn left or turn right
Might carry on solo on my very own path
Decisions are hard, you can not go back
Regrets so strong they can come back to haunt
Why can't you love two, why is it so wrong
The reason I felt I have to write this love song
I care so much, but I had to leave
I fear I can no longer wear my heart on my sleeve
It's time to leave and go it all alone
It is the only way to fly solo
You need no one to keep safe be strong alone until you meet your grave
Take care you both I more than cared
You came to me at the crossroads of my heart
This decision I feel there is no way to win or too loose
To fall in love was never my plan but rules they say you can only love one
One's much older but I know he care's
One younger, too, with his full life to share
But what if I choose and do it all wrong
Eyes filling with tears as I hear our old love song
As we lay on the grass under the bright moonlight
Watching bats over head flying through the night sky
Maybe I shouldn't turn left or turn right
Might carry on solo on my very own path
Decisions are hard, you can not go back
Regrets so strong they can come back to haunt
Why can't you love two, why is it so wrong
The reason I felt I have to write this love song
I care so much, but I had to leave
I fear I can no longer wear my heart on my sleeve
It's time to leave and go it all alone
It is the only way to fly solo
You need no one to keep safe be strong alone until you meet your grave
Take care you both I more than cared
You came to me at the crossroads of my heart
Published 28th May 2021
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28th May 2021 10:04pm
30th May 2021 1:33am
One person in love with two people
Some may say that is quite a great headache to have
Whoever you choose someone always gets hurt
The heart that loves genuinely
May find it difficult to let go of the person they love
It is in accepting the choice that the other has made
When allowing them to have the freedom to live without them
By acknowledging that decision true love shines through
Even when letting go
Some may say that is quite a great headache to have
Whoever you choose someone always gets hurt
The heart that loves genuinely
May find it difficult to let go of the person they love
It is in accepting the choice that the other has made
When allowing them to have the freedom to live without them
By acknowledging that decision true love shines through
Even when letting go
14th Jun 2021 12:57pm
Flip a coin? Hehe, maybe not. Those situations are never fun. Someone or maybe even everyone might get hurt. But it's about what the heart wants. Always go with the heart.
14th Jun 2021 1:25pm
Grammar issues:
*"too loose" should be "to lose"
*"care's" shouldn't have an apostrophe (you only use apostrophes when abbreviating; ie "care is" becomes "care's")
*"over head" should be one word
I like the rhyme of "so wrong" and "love song", and the imagery of flying bats. The last line, also, is poignant. To improve the poem I suggest stripping it back to these elements, getting rid of a lot of the more cliched stuff ("heart on my sleeve"/"to fall in love was only my plan").
You spend a lot of time explaining the narrator's feelings in this poem. But to take your poetry to the next level you might want to suggest the feelings through imagery and metaphor, rather than just direct explanation.
*"too loose" should be "to lose"
*"care's" shouldn't have an apostrophe (you only use apostrophes when abbreviating; ie "care is" becomes "care's")
*"over head" should be one word
I like the rhyme of "so wrong" and "love song", and the imagery of flying bats. The last line, also, is poignant. To improve the poem I suggest stripping it back to these elements, getting rid of a lot of the more cliched stuff ("heart on my sleeve"/"to fall in love was only my plan").
You spend a lot of time explaining the narrator's feelings in this poem. But to take your poetry to the next level you might want to suggest the feelings through imagery and metaphor, rather than just direct explanation.
20th Apr 2022 1:20pm
20th Apr 2022 6:17pm
