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This
This ever ever
Will be like a loan on the never never
Lying like a thrall
Perhaps waiting for some judgement call
Or eternities crunch
On my soul like dust
To again be thrust
Into a spiral to start anew the fall
Will be like a loan on the never never
Lying like a thrall
Perhaps waiting for some judgement call
Or eternities crunch
On my soul like dust
To again be thrust
Into a spiral to start anew the fall
Published 27th Mar 2021
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27th Mar 2021 11:45pm
Hello there.
This really felt quite whimsical and it added this very gentle lilt to your words which I really liked about this little piece. The piece feels very circular, as if things are coming to fruition in their own natural time.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
This really felt quite whimsical and it added this very gentle lilt to your words which I really liked about this little piece. The piece feels very circular, as if things are coming to fruition in their own natural time.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
28th Mar 2021 11:49am
Hi there
Yes it was a bit whimsical, came from watching people queueing for take aways that reminded me of the human condition and the reoccurring themes that move us all, and made me smile.
Thanks for reading. J
Yes it was a bit whimsical, came from watching people queueing for take aways that reminded me of the human condition and the reoccurring themes that move us all, and made me smile.
Thanks for reading. J
