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EBB/FLOW
We exchange the lead
In this dance- the ebb and flow
Like tongues in a kiss
In this dance- the ebb and flow
Like tongues in a kiss
Published 26th Nov 2020
| Edited 27th Nov 2020
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26th Nov 2020 10:48pm
I love everything about this. But I’m hung up on the word empowerment. Mostly because it implies that when it’s exchanged, someone ISN’T empowered. And I don’t think that’s what you mean.
Not sure if you are looking for a specific number of syllables. But could you use something like dominance or control?
Not sure if you are looking for a specific number of syllables. But could you use something like dominance or control?
27th Nov 2020 00:24am
I hear you. Attempt at fix:
We exchange the lead
In this dance- the ebb and flow
Like tongues in a kiss
We exchange the lead
In this dance- the ebb and flow
Like tongues in a kiss
27th Nov 2020 00:31am
27th Nov 2020 7:01am
