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Captured
These feelings are consuming my soul, and it feels they
will never have a true place to go.
Visions engulf my brain, some of pure pleasure as well
as pure pain.
Hoping and wishing they won't drive me insane.
You captured my being with your intelligence and views.
You're an enigma like me.
Others can't fathom what makes us tick.
Well my solution just came, you ended things, there's nothing
left but pure pain.
will never have a true place to go.
Visions engulf my brain, some of pure pleasure as well
as pure pain.
Hoping and wishing they won't drive me insane.
You captured my being with your intelligence and views.
You're an enigma like me.
Others can't fathom what makes us tick.
Well my solution just came, you ended things, there's nothing
left but pure pain.
Published 3rd Feb 2012
| Edited 20th Feb 2012
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Anonymous
4th Feb 2012 3:36am
You are a wordsmith...a conjuror of words...may have helped you get through school...because when people speak or write in an indirect manner with a good choice of words and metaphors - IT MAY SEEM LIKE THEY KNOW WHAT THEY ARE DOING...
but...there are grammatical errors
your should be you are or you'r
you have a bit of style and a bit of substance
you need to write more to develop your talent
write on!
but...there are grammatical errors
your should be you are or you'r
you have a bit of style and a bit of substance
you need to write more to develop your talent
write on!
Everyone's writing style is not the same and thank God for that. I thank you for your input. I have been writing short stories as well as poetry since I was six and I feel I am very good. (Word Smith = major compliment) I also corrected that typo, I posted this from my cell thank you for pointing it out. And I DO KNOW WHAT I AM DOING.. =) All poetry is not for everyone...
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11th May 2013 7:00pm
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