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THE WISER ARE RESPONSIBLE.
THE WISER ARE RESPONSIBLE.
Women are equal to men in everything.
Even they are wiser than some stupid men.
As they are weaker in flesh, they count on mind,
which bestows on them a post of high esteem.
One of their superior traits is that they can
reproduce the human kind, which men cannot.
They give power to their home, higher than that
which a man can give through his conceited work.
Countries depend on their kids to build their strength,
and to stop the other nations to control
and to change their laws to fit their stupid mind,
swerving them to servile men to reach their goals.
This will make the nations weak and not advanced.
Then the power will return to the strong flesh.
Nations will go backward if women don't give
new, wise men to home and if they waste their time.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Women are equal to men in everything.
Even they are wiser than some stupid men.
As they are weaker in flesh, they count on mind,
which bestows on them a post of high esteem.
One of their superior traits is that they can
reproduce the human kind, which men cannot.
They give power to their home, higher than that
which a man can give through his conceited work.
Countries depend on their kids to build their strength,
and to stop the other nations to control
and to change their laws to fit their stupid mind,
swerving them to servile men to reach their goals.
This will make the nations weak and not advanced.
Then the power will return to the strong flesh.
Nations will go backward if women don't give
new, wise men to home and if they waste their time.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 3rd Oct 2020
| Edited 4th Oct 2020
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Oh if you think you’ve given praise
to women when you say,
perhaps to mitigate, assuage,
the ignorance shown in your patriarchal hunches,
that they are wiser than
some stupid men,
you need to think again.
To have more sense
than those whose brains
are mush
is hardly something
that’s beyond the ken
of even children set below
the age of ten.
So what you’ve done
in saying what you’ve said
is set the bar for wisdom down so low
you’ve made all women dunces.
And by the way,
your title of this prose in line breaks piece
doth need, in order to be comprehensible,
a statement on the thing it is
for which the "wiser" are responsible.
to women when you say,
perhaps to mitigate, assuage,
the ignorance shown in your patriarchal hunches,
that they are wiser than
some stupid men,
you need to think again.
To have more sense
than those whose brains
are mush
is hardly something
that’s beyond the ken
of even children set below
the age of ten.
So what you’ve done
in saying what you’ve said
is set the bar for wisdom down so low
you’ve made all women dunces.
And by the way,
your title of this prose in line breaks piece
doth need, in order to be comprehensible,
a statement on the thing it is
for which the "wiser" are responsible.
4th Oct 2020 6:59pm
6th Oct 2020 8:35pm
I agree Joseph. Please feel free to express yourself without being discouraged.
8th Oct 2020 3:30pm
8th Oct 2020 5:13pm
No one is claiming that J-Z should not be free to express himself. The issue is whether **the way** he does so does not violate the rules of grammar, avoids bull-shite buzzers, shows rather than tells and is effective in making readers see with their eyes shut.
5th Oct 2020 10:17pm
Women are equal to men in everything.
Even they are wiser than some stupid men.
Leaving aside the fact that for your claim that women "are weaker in flesh, [and therefore, unlike men] they count on mind" to make sense, you should have written "they count on **their mindS**" and gone on to say something about what it is that women count on their minds **to do**, isn't saying this -- as well as implying that the post that is bestowed upon them by using their minds to supply them with what they lack in physical strength is something men do not possess -- a contradiction of your previous claim that "women are equal to men **in everything**"?
And isn't "Nations will go backward if women don't give/ new, wise men to home" also nonsense? "Don't give ... to home??
Even they are wiser than some stupid men.
Leaving aside the fact that for your claim that women "are weaker in flesh, [and therefore, unlike men] they count on mind" to make sense, you should have written "they count on **their mindS**" and gone on to say something about what it is that women count on their minds **to do**, isn't saying this -- as well as implying that the post that is bestowed upon them by using their minds to supply them with what they lack in physical strength is something men do not possess -- a contradiction of your previous claim that "women are equal to men **in everything**"?
And isn't "Nations will go backward if women don't give/ new, wise men to home" also nonsense? "Don't give ... to home??
Dear Daniel,
Thank you very much for your very kind comment. Actually, l am overconfident in my poetry, and l have never stopped writing. I believe that poetry is a sacred message, and l am responsible for every word l write. I try to make my poetry a representation of myself. Therefore, nobody can discourage me because my poetry is me, and l like myself. However, lam very thankful to you for your very encouraging words, and l hope they will be the beginning of a great friendship between you and me. Thank you very much, Daniel.
Thank you very much for your very kind comment. Actually, l am overconfident in my poetry, and l have never stopped writing. I believe that poetry is a sacred message, and l am responsible for every word l write. I try to make my poetry a representation of myself. Therefore, nobody can discourage me because my poetry is me, and l like myself. However, lam very thankful to you for your very encouraging words, and l hope they will be the beginning of a great friendship between you and me. Thank you very much, Daniel.
